I stare at the wind blowing the wild flowers,
The ugly rope burns against the skin of my neck;
A fitting end after such an arduous trek.
The last seven minutes have flown by like hours.
Look at the bitter hatred in their dark eyes.
Roughly, my hands are tied tightly behind my back,
I lower my gaze to the rutted wagon track
They want no excuses; I will tell them no lies.
It was a mistake to rob the National Bank
Guards were waiting for me when I came through the door
I shot two of them dead, blood pooling on the floor
Expressions of surprise until their wide eyes went blank
Now I stand in a buckboard below a large tree,
I’m detached from my feelings and hollow inside
There’s an awkward pause, but justice won’t be denied.
Twelve grim smiles are the last images I see.
Author notes
Word Bank: Flower, ugly, burn, hatred, back, excuses, mistake, waiting, dead, tree, hollow, awkward
Image Credit: http://thecreativeforum.com/photopost/data/507/3noose-med.jpg
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A contest entry
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300 points, ended October 10, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Hmmm... there are a few verses missing! There must have been a lot of events between the heist and the gallows. How did he get captured? How long did he spend in jail before going to court? What were the judge and jury like? There is so much potential here to tell a full story... I feel like you're giving me chapter one and chapter eleven without the benefit of the intermediate chapters.
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I am glad that you enjoyed it enough to want more. Thank you for reading and commenting.
Mike
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Mike
I am there and can feel the tightening around my neck.Another dramatic piece of poetry. I think you should consider writing a book my friend.
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I have considered a book of fiction. I have enough to make a short story, but nothing that is ready to print.
Mike
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wow. this is such a good write (as you have probably noticed from all these coments) I really like it...good luck
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I enjoyed the contest.
Mike
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I lower my gaze to the rutted wagon track
They want no excuses; I will tell them no lies.
Mike, this is absolutely amazing. The energy in this write is exquisitely real, and kind of scary
Excellent story here, bummer man.
I'll miss ya, say hi to my grampie for me, if you see him
jin
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It isn't that bad. I have just been grumpy lately.
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Mike
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Superb
A very fine write, my friend. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate it alot.
Mike
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You are great with word banks! I cannot do those so well, but you get great stuff out of them. As always, great write and good luck in the contest!
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To me they are like what a sculptor sees in a block of wood or a stone. I just write what I see when I look at the first words. I dont know how it happens.
Its fun. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Mike
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wow I see you made the end a little too subliminal which kept my head think, which I liked.. nicely done very well penned!
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I am glad you enjoyed the poem. I was thinking about a movie I saw at a Drive-In as a kid. It was called Once Upon A Time In The West.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Mike
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Wow nicely done
great use of word bank great story. This just popped in your head, I'd like to take a look around in there no doubt some real cool stuff laying around in there. Great job again, best of luck to you, Boog
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You definitely do not want to take a close look inside my brain. You would be bored. Lots of cobwebs, dust, and vacant spaces.
Mike
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WOW!
This jumps off the page, again, a great story from you.
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I am glad you enjoyed the poem.
Mike
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I like it, it's a lovely story.
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I am glad you enjoyed it. It is a bit on the grusome side.
Mike
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Wow Chucks, I love this..you have done a superb write using the word bank. Amazing piece of poetry! I hope you win cause it looks gold to me!!!!!!!
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I am glad you liked it. It is kind of a grim subject. Thank you very much for reading and commenting.
Mike
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