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Visible In Darkness


Her blackness was visible
to the enemy, in a place
where hard wood trees bound
a woman's anguish; hair twisted

in Spanish Moss of ash claws

swaying in the air,

here the oaks blanch the
blood of the Lambs,
in their white lace corsets.

Yes, this is an ember blonde
town, where crewcut sheriffs
run down the innocent at 3:00 am,
and you can hear men whisper
curses through tainted walls
against the darkness, as white
magnolia blossoms can not be seen,

white robes marked with KKK
can not hide in shadows
nor can Revlon conceal the color
of skin, where white satin sheets
glim first drops of blood,
and I wonder if they realize
it ruins the crotches of
cotton panties; turning us
all to scarlet women:
deserving of deformation,
like the women in the trees


and my rage washes between
blue lines, in a place that
murders all that bled white.

 

 

Author notes

Thoughts on places like where I live...beautiful country and the KKK still lives and rallies here...will we ever be free from such ignorance and prejudice?

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  • Xianaria gold member
    October 12

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    A brilliant piece, reflecting on one of the still-remaining evils in our society. I loved it, and it well-deserves these shinies!

    ~ Tim


  • SteveS gold member
    September 16

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    Wow!! I love the intensity of this, and you use of metaphor and imagery is stellar. I'm very glad I happened by.


  • daviscth silver member
    August 24

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    This is a wonderful poem and has amazing imagery. It's strange to think that the KKK still hang around in this day and age isn't it? But I know for a fact that they do because my husband and I went to meet with one of their leaders about 10 years ago when we were trying to get custody of his daughter. His ex wife and her new husband had hired him to work for them then paid him with a cold check of all things. Scary stuff to be sure. Thanks for sharing this with me.


  • Lowell Poe
    February 17

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    This was just incredible.
    Just a phenomenal piece of art and social commentary.

    ..where crew cut sheriff's run down the innocent at 3:am..

    Hard to believe lass....
    you bring those good old boys down to Brooklyn.....
    in their pretty white dresses made of sheets.......
    we'll explain everything to them.

    This was written with great passion to detail and crafted to read in it's excellent form.
    The title suggests the obvious secret...
    exposing the wolf to the pack....
    or possibly a nowhere to hide scenario.....
    either way it is a powerful piece.

    Peace
    little
    gypsy,
    Liam


  • Arrianna MacEwan
    January 24

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    I am from a small town in pa where the clan owns a farm and drives around proudly displaying their garments hanging in the back of their sports cars. very sad.


  • Swan song gold member
    January 17

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    This is just intense and I remember the days in Carolina and Georgia it still exist also inIdaho sadly
    well done here!


  • Desire gold member
    January 15

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    Oh My Word!!


    Oh Beautiful~ Oy~ this tears at my Heartstrings
    I live next to a city where the Grand Master once lived and OMG~ the story I could pass on with that-
    it was as if Divinity placed us there for a reason-
    (felt to me like YES)
    The energy of Hate- that could be felt through the tv- let alone I would imagine in person-
    indescribable

    Sad those who take action with Hate- pass it onto their children
    some receptive- some are not

    I still remember the images of frail windchimes-
    hanging from trees-
    mother-child
    in the school yard for children of same hue
    to observe like a pinata at a birthday party
    I still cry~

    Powerful this is Precious!
    Injustice- how can Peace plant seeds
    in tainted soil-

    very carefully but with persistence
    More need to read this Gem
    Congratulations on Your Trophies!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
    Best wishes too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • ArtRocks27
    January 13

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    Very nice...love the description and word use you have put forth in this poem. And i entirely agree with you on the aspect of trying to be rid of ignorance and prejudice from people such as the KKK and others. It was a very enraging poem i must say. It has a quality to it that made me want to jump up and do something. Thank you for sharing this with me and thank you for entering in my contest!

    Maggie

  • imahealer
    January 2

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    Can't catch My Breath!

    How terribly real and full of grim truths is the image you paint in metaphors, crafted by only the best poetess! KKK is alive and well in many big cities, especially Chicago. How demented are these men and women to judge anyone. I can't imagine anyone writing anything as good as this! Besy wishes and I've missed you terribly!
    sis,
    Linda

  • Eusebius
    January 2

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    Ah, an old tale, but well told, indeed! Yes, when shall evil leave us? Never I fear.... fine penning most defly done!!


  • jayyniecakes.
    January 2

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    this is a very interesting and beautiful poem... and i love the way it flows. the anger at the end of the poem is a nice twist. it gave me one question though.....

    was the blood from a period or from their cherry being popped?

    also, the word panties seems a bit awkward in this poem. if it were poem i think i would use the word underwear...... or some kind of word relating to or like that.

    Yes, this is an ember blonde
    town, where crewcut sheriffs
    run down the innocent at 3:00 am,
    and you can hear men whisper
    curses through tainted walls
    against the darkness, as white
    magnolia blossoms can not be seen,

    that was my favorite part^^^^

    i hope i made some useful suggestions.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    December 16, 2008
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    My this is a quite deep one, thanks for your entry


  • camus gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    You have successfully and effectively employed a number of poetic devices like alliteration -..." oaks blanch the
    blood of the Lambs"

    cleverly reinforcing the brutal tone of your poetic voice with the alliterative use of the harsh letter "b". Your symbolism and imagery also echo your theme, mood and tone but always subtly, implicitly not explicitly.

    You are a fine poet, Kimberly, but an even finer lady. Tony x


  • Never Fall in Love
    December 1, 2008

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    yes.


    There is some brilliant imagery and phrasing.

    You're in, congrats x.
    http://allpoetry.com/group/show/UNPLANNED%20as%20unexpected%20as%20you


  • Ryno
    November 30, 2008
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    Yes

    I rewarded this piece a silver trophy - and I already told you what I thought of it.

    Please wait for other judge.

  • Ryno
    November 23, 2008

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    Your phrasing worked really well and the images were very creative....very strong ideas, strong flow, strong emotion.

    Really, everything I like in poetry is here. Especially that vivid link between reality and poetry. This poem depicts this and makes it seem so much more real and problematic.

    It really makes you realize how ugly this world can be. Very, very well written.


  • Ryno
    November 22, 2008
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    feeling it
    ~prewrites, come and get them

  • Francis Vincent
    November 21, 2008

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    good job

    wanted to do a second read
    very telling
    "white robes marked with KKK
    can not hide in shadows"
    i was drawn to this line
    it's a amoxymoron
    if that is the word
    over a century now,no?
    these dudes hide in plain sight
    they think they are right, moral, just, etc
    yet they wear a mask, so to speak
    if they really believed in themselves
    they would stand tall
    without the casper the friendly ghost costume
    slickering in doorways, corners, behind poles, etc
    they probably dress their kids funny, too
    or peek behing window shades
    have they no pride?

  • Francis Vincent
    November 17, 2008
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    very good

    great work on putting your idealogy to verse


  • poeticweaver gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    Amazingly Expressed!

    Such a potent piece that shows how long still we must follow the pathway to peace, and open our hearts as well as our minds that we may learn, try and feel what it would be like to be in someone elses shoes, and let wisdom guide us in the light. So much said here my friend, and I thank you for sharing your talented soul, as well as your loving heart!

    Much love, and all the best in all you do!
    -Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo


  • XxAbby-Jay-CrunkxX
    November 16, 2008

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    wow amazing poem . the imagery in it is fantastic. im looking forward to reading many more poems from you. wonderful write


  • Midnight-Tragedy
    November 16, 2008
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    Love it.
    Keep up the great work.


  • Akari
    November 10, 2008

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    WOW!!!

    Such Imagery, and put into such poignant words. Excellent Job Keep up the Great Work!


  • Stardust-luvr
    October 18, 2008

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    WOW!!! Sis such poignant and profound messages and imagery spoken from your heart. well done and many loving blessings always xxx


  • csmmoms2
    October 13, 2008
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    Wow

    White sheets with RED letters. Dragons on horseback. Darkened souls still ride.


  • trueasagrayrose
    October 12, 2008
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    well written! i didnt know that the KKK still rallied. love this poem. ♥


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    October 1, 2008

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    This left me with chills, it is hard to believe in this day and age, that groups like this are not hoarded out in droves but they exist and flower sadly. Best to you for putting this poignant piece out there


  • going nowhere
    September 30, 2008
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    this was haunting... and chilling to the bone. so well written.


  • xSarahx
    September 30, 2008

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    Very powerful. I love it how you made anger and sadness collide, it leaves the reader in a state of shock at the end. Jaw dropping! Good job!


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 30, 2008

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    You have done a great job. Personally, I have always detested the KKK and other similar organizations. Unfortunately in a country where freedom of speech is allowed, these dull apes will find a niche. It is up to us who cherish our freedom to speak out against them - not once, but constantly and to raise our children to have the same strong values and vigilance.

    Great message.

    Mike


  • trekkergirl
    September 30, 2008

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    oh I forgot wanted to tell you that I just loved the background here. I haven't seen one like it before. Great job in picking it out. Goes well with the poem. Hugs

  • trekkergirl
    September 30, 2008
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    This is a very heart-felt poem. And you asked in your AN on whether or not we will be ever free of our prejudices like the KKK... I personally believe that we will be. It just takes time, education, and people see each other... learning from each other... and experiencing life together. When you know someone it is hard to be afraid or superior to that person. That's my opinion anyway. This is a wonderful write. Good job


  • Anu-Nataraj
    September 30, 2008

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    Nice.......

    I luv that line--->'My rage washes between blue lines'
    truly written well...beautiful work poet!!!
    ~Hugs~


  • Congruence
    September 30, 2008

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    It is heartfelt and a lot of thought and effort has gone into this - I loved the imagery, the description of the actual people was very good, I liked the 'revlon'description, particularly good. The last three lines work really well, there is tangible despair in there.

    Excellent stuff.

    x


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    September 30, 2008

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    Superb plus

    An excellent write, indeed. You express yourself quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. With the help of such organizations as the Southern Poverty Law Center*, perhaps we will. Here's a link to their website: http://www.splcenter.org/index.jsp


  • Maxboy gold member
    September 30, 2008

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    !!! WOW !!!

    That is filled with such sadness and despair, very moving.

    Great Job
    Love
    Don


    • mysticstorm gold member
      September 30, 2008
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      Sad truth of much of the hidden US...thank youf for reading and commenting...


  • Grey Mouser
    September 29, 2008

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    Dayuuum... now that is a powerful expose on the backward times that have somehow managed to find their way into the present with acceptance and tolerance. Unbelievable that such doings are still allowed to go on and take place in the "heartland" of this country.
    Well written sublime one .

    Love

    • mysticstorm gold member
      September 30, 2008

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      Thanks, luv for the comment...remember I am in "Deliverance"...makes me worry a LOT...and they are getting ready for the KKK rally, right after the Apple Fest...oxymoron in my mind...
      Love:


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 29, 2008

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    This is an amazing write sis!!! I love the strong voice you have used in here and the imagery that really tells the story of what this kind of prejudice is like!!

    It's hard to believe that people are still so ignorant and that groups like the KKK still exist and are tolerated!!

    Fantastic poem!!

    • mysticstorm gold member
      September 30, 2008
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      Thanks, sis...sad to me that they are allowed to rally on the square of this beautiful mountain town and are supported...makes you wonder how much we really have grown as a free country...
      thanks for thw comment...
      Love,
      sis


  • lunarlunacy
    September 29, 2008

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    WOW! Strong write. I too have grimaced at the ignorance of such close mindedness plagueing an otherwise pleasant rural backwood place of solace, both West Virginia and Tennessee reak of such travesty.
    So I moved back to Texas LOL, where everything is bigger, especially the fragile egos of little big men.

    • mysticstorm gold member
      September 30, 2008
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      LOL...everything is bigger in Texas, but I live int the beautiful mountains of North Ga at moment and it is crazy here...they really filmed "Delieverance" here and are proud of it...how sad is that...
      thanks for reading and commenting...
      mystic

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