My heart bleeds the last drop for him
our importance for each other
our discoveries
our adventures
he will always be with me
until the end
He will be my forever
as ever time lets me stay
he will be my life partner
As my heart beats
last drain the blood from me
I will be here waiting.....
on you.
Author notes
The one i love #1 prompt
A contest entry
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600 points, ended October 8, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Me Till The End by Sorrow is the name.
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I haven't wrote in three months I think I still have a block?
Comments
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Very Good
I Really Liked The Whole Story Behind It
Thank You And Good Luck
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Outstanding
A poem that speaks of undying love and devotion withgreat power. Your words are very strong and you really get across the depth of your feelings for him. I thought this was romantic and full of emotion. Best of luck in the contest.
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lots of emotion, veyr good
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Wonderful Job...
A wonderful poem full of emotion. Great job, i greatly enjoyed reading it. Please keep writing, and sharing it with us...
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that was a really good poem. i liked it!
thanks for entering
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Its short, but profound and emotional.
Your choice of simple words, short sentences is creative and adds to the depth of your work.
Seems like he’s a very special person…
May god bless
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I really liked the main lines to this poem and the heart felt emotion contained in it, but I do feel as if it just dropped off or that it was missing a middle. I wonder if you could embed some more depth into an experience of an emotion or adventure or something else that strikes a chord when you think of him. Just a thought Much love, Kelly
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hey
thinks for the input if u want to revise it you can. im always lookinh for help.
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I liked the idea behind this poem, and the lines "As my heart beats, last drain the blood from me", but would have liked more structure to this poem. It seems a bit haphazardly written. Have you thought about expanding it and reformatting it to include a bit more consistency?
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yes
I have ive been working on it for days now.
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very dark love poem
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i like how this takes something normally fluffy like love and puts a dark twist on it--very nice
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