This abandoned place sits in silence
yet the memories linger on,
as they whisper of past innocent love
that long ago was destroyed.
Up and down and sideways
we would sit for hours in such ease,
sharing dreams from deep within
as trust was forged with such strong promise.
So many days of anticipation I remember
as I return in my quest to face the pain,
that has haunted me since I waited that day
and my hopes of our future were surrendered.
But it seems that I must relinquish
that faith I held for so long,
I desperately wish to hear your spirit
speak to me about your abrupt disappearance.
I still hear the laughter and feel the comfort
of times I thought would never end,
but all I hear now is that so soft squeak
as our abiding friendship floats away upon the breeze.
And as we shared our secrets
enveloped within this world for two,
I feel the tears roll slowly
for the promise that never ensued.
The threads of my life's tapestry
began with parts of you
and as it starts to unravel
I search for answers from the past.
But this place sits strangely silent
for the memories come from me,
there's not a wisp of you here anymore
and a part of me now withers.
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- B&W Photo Prompt Contest by Girl With Guitar.
700 points, ended October 30, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
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"I feel the tears roll slowly
for the promise that never ensued."
I typically enjoy stories of promises gone wrong, mainly because they can be so crushing and if the story is written well then the reader can empathise.
I mostly like your desperate wishes for knowledge near the start and then the loss of chances to know. If this is true, I don't think you should give up entirely, and I believe there's always going to be some sort of spirit that remains there of them. It'll never leave so long as you have faith and it doesn't have to be where they left, you know, as cheesy as it may sound they really do remain in your heart, for as long as you want. So that's just my personal comment if this is a true story.
And poetically, this is an excellent write, the vocabulary and the flow, it's great. Very well done and thank you for the entry.
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This poem plucked at the heartstrings of a deep rooted sadness Beautifully penned
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This is such another great piece, you capture such innocence and beauty.I am frowning at the fact that the picture for this contest was one I chose to use for my Object series of contests lol. Back to the drawing board lol Best to you in the contest
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Excellent poem and the words made me really feel them and what it made me feel was sad. All great poems draw you in and this one really did--good luck in the contest!
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very good. I like the picture very much!
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there's not a wisp of you here anymore
and a part of me now withers.
I love those parting lines. There so.......I dunno. They just touch me deepy. I love this poem. Very moving. A great read and take on the prompt. Well done!
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