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I Feel

I feel like shit
I hate myself
I can't stand it
I want to cry
all the time
I am worthless
I can't do things right
I lost my head
panic took me
back to my shell
I will be
I didn't think
all I did was breathe
tried to control
lost it all
one simple thing
I couldn't even do
clouded in breathing
lost in believing
it would go away
I feel like shit
and that is all
I have to say.

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  • EvansV
    April 11
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    very truthful and sad

    i like your work striat to the point


  • Jeb
    March 16

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    Ouch!

    This one really hits home! I know exactly how this feels. You did a great job writing this dark piece, there is not a word that seems out of place. I like your ending here as well, it just kinda sums it all up. Great job!


  • Dark Prince Chaos
    December 1, 2008

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    beautifully felled with sorrow this one as i read it seemed it wasfelled with pain truly an emoshonal peace great work truly beautiful -bows- once more great work


  • Glenn
    September 29, 2008

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    Nice saddest Poem

    Only sufferers can understand your pain!

    This does have the autumn atmosphere to it.You're right though. Everything has a life force surrounding it, it makes us who we are. Nicely written.