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Happily ever after




This feisty fairy found the magic mirror all alone
    And summoned up the spell to meet a mate.
Before the fairy found it it was working on its own
    And settling the great affairs of state.
The mirror isn't happy, so it plays a little joke,
The fairy's hopes of happiness may disappear in smoke.

From foaming fogs that seem to sing an image soon appears,
    A mediaeval castle on a hill.
So dark and black and overgrown, forgotten through the years
    And deep within its curtain all is still.
"You'll find your doom, in tower room, atop that brooding pile."
The nymph now thinks she's struck it rich and flies off with a smile.

Two hundred years ago a witch was not the least amused
    When she was told to pack her broom and fly.
She left in haste but was not chased, the courtiers were bemused
    By dreadful spells that echoed from on high.
"You'll have to sleep and rot away until the wedding day"
The foolish folk will have to stay while years are whiled away.

    The fairy flies to find the room
        Where magic says she'll meet her doom.
    The mirror whispers to each cat
        "I wonder what she'll make of that"
    The nasty glass is filled with glee,
        At all the sadness he will see.
    Yet things are seldom as they seem,
        When fairy folk begin to dream.
    I know that you will understand -
        There's been a change in fairyland.
    Our fairy is a modern girl
        The mirror's scheme is in a whirl.

Asleep in bed atop the tower, with dreams of whips and boots
    And not to wake without a loving kiss.
The fairy flies to meet her fate, and follow her pursuits,
    She's such a bold and sexy little miss.
Prepared to kiss, and more besides, to get the love she's craved.
I wonder if she thinks about the others she'll have saved.

She finds the room, the sleeping royal, it's all that she has dreamed,
    A perfect end to quite a tiring flight.
The mirror sees and worries that it's not as he has schemed
    Instead of wrong it's turning out quite right,
The princess wakes to fairy kiss and finds a perfect day,
Who would have guessed the fairy and the princess are both gay!

In modern times two girls can wed and so they tie the knot;
    The castle wakes to gaiety and joy.
The ancient days have passed away, their bigotry forgot.
    It's girl on girl and also boy on boy.
So everyone is happy with the way the story ends,
I wish that life was just the same as all my let's pretends.





Author notes

The picture is the prompt and is Secret Visions by manips-of-artist2 on deviantart

Sorry about the word count it's not a lot over ...

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  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    Not a lot!..lol. You have weaved your magic tho, a beautifully penned tale, made a great read!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 1, 2008

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    A fascinating tale!! Love the twist at the end there!

    Yes, just a little over the world count lol.. but a cool read nonetheless!


  • LadyJane13
    October 1, 2008

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    It was really great reading this...good for a laugh at the irony of things past.Yep life and the world has seen many changes and you have made me smile thinking of them!


  • Poetdontknowit
    October 1, 2008

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    NICE!

    Such awesome imagery you threw into this one! Divine photo also! I sooo love your vivid imagination!!!!!!
    POETDONTKNOWIT
    WRITING IT HER OWN WAY


  • PerVirtuous
    October 1, 2008
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    This is very confusing. Why would the fairy go to meet her doom on purpose? Wny not change that to groom? It makes more sense and keeps the rhyme. Quite a fantasy.


    • cricketjeff gold member
      October 1, 2008
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      Doom is not always negative, its first definition is destiny or fate. Habit has changed that to a negative.

      • PerVirtuous
        October 1, 2008

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        Main Entry: 1doom
        Pronunciation: \ˈdüm\
        Function: noun
        Etymology: Middle English, from Old English dōm; akin to Old High German tuom condition, state, Old English dōn to do
        Date: before 12th century

        3 a: destiny ; especially : unhappy destiny b: death , ruin

        When the dictionary says 'especially' then that is what the reader is going to take from the word, and quite rightfully. If you are going to use the word differently, you had better provide the context to support using a definition out of it's normal meaning. I don't believe you have done that here.

        • cricketjeff gold member
          October 1, 2008

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          doom
          Etymology: OE dōm judgement
          noun destiny, fate
          ruin
          catastrophe
          death
          judgement or condemnation
          final judgement
          a picture of the Last Judgement

          You always think one dictionary is "right"! English words have flexible meanings remember Humpty, however in this case I want to imply that bad things will happen, the mirror is trying to set the fairy up for a fall so the double meaning of the word is helpful.

          • PerVirtuous
            October 1, 2008
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            Thank you for admitting you were wrong and I was right. Then why would she go? I wouldn't. Tell me my doom is in England and I will have even less interest in going than I have now.

            • cricketjeff gold member
              October 1, 2008
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              As usual you fail to grasp things
              What I wanted to do was misdirect people, the fairy, being sophisticated, knows hat doom means destiny, good or bad, so she goes, the mirror (it is from Maine I believe) has a lumpish understanding of English at best, thinks he is giving her fair warning. As it happens the fairy got everything she wanted, you would have stayed at home and missed out on the partner of your dreams, DO pay attention at the back!


              • PerVirtuous
                October 1, 2008
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                Right. And this is under 100 words, too. Ha ha ha. Face it. You are wrong a lot.

                • cricketjeff gold member
                  October 1, 2008
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                  the slight error in the word count is mentioned in the AN, it is only slightly (346 words) over.
                  You again labour under a misapprehension, if I am wrong I am definitively wrong, in other words in the event of a discrepency between me and realitiy, it is always reality that is at fault. (Thank-you Douglas Adams)


  • Symphony
    October 1, 2008

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    fantastic

    bravo this was amazing ; i certainly was not expecting the ending that you provided us with - and yet it was a lovely end to the tale, although it did make me sad to suddenly realise that our fairytales as they were are now changing - something i had not thought about before in this way...


  • JohnnyD gold member
    October 1, 2008

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    quite the enjoyable little romp of desirous fantasy and quite enjoyed the rhyming word choices-as always.

    however, I am a cat fancier and I'd almost prefer those two cats rather than the gal as I think her wings would chafe my arms???

    Len


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 30, 2008
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    Oh!


  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    September 30, 2008
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    Divinely decadent fantasy --- I love it!!!

    Rainbow clad bunnies


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    September 30, 2008
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    Now that's different


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 30, 2008
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    Ah!


  • Pearl-1
    September 30, 2008
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    if its want you want go for it
    good luck in the contest xxx


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 29, 2008
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    Hmmm. ok have her

  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 29, 2008

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    Well... I guess that is less than 100 words all right. Let me know if you add any. Bank these bunnies in the mean time.

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