In a flash of a moment
my sky of stars
turned into
a mountain of mud;
the fickleness of nature
is forcing me to hide,
and in one flow of madness
the destruction of disaster
took the place of
the firmness of foundation;
the stubbornness of nature
is preventing her in seeking me.
Mother Earth loves to play
hide and seek -
and my buried thoughts
are always in the losing end.
Author notes
landslide
A contest entry
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Comments
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Sounds like a metaphor for what my hearts doing at the moment, all over the place and falling rapidly.
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Nice use of metaphor...how our thoughts can become caught in a landslide, and how stubbornness can hold us back. Glad to see a different prompt used. Well done. Thanks for your entry
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So Natural
Really enjoyed the natural imagery you displayed in this poem
"and in one flow of madness
the destruction of disaster
took the place of
the firmness of foundation;"
you capture earth is perfectly
Thank you from sharing
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Mother Earth loves to play hide and seek in the form of landslide...brilliant!
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Wow! I love the line
'Mother Earth loves to play
hide and seek'
This poem is beautiful to me.
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