necessity is the mother of invention.
time to step into the forth dimension.
and this may sound a little strange.
but if you're going to pay the piper.
you will want to get your change!
if you can feel what i mean.
then already, you know how.
the time to take the forth step?
well, that time is now!
you're only on the third step.
now don't you fall!
you're only on the third step.
and there are twelve in all.
we're all here in this moment.
just learning to create.
so we can take a forth step.
to an energetic state.
but our time is dripping sweat.
it's time to let go of regret.
because once you've paid the piper.
change is what you'll get!
Author notes
spiritual evolution.
A contest entry
- Sand Through the Hourglass by jadeangyal.
900 points, ended June 9, 11 entries
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Comments
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truthfully done
old soul you.
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This is a deep and amazing poem, though slightly off-topic for my contest.
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OOh found one I havn't read, yayy
Mmm, You know, I used to read your work, and just like it, cos its good,
now I read it, and try to understand it (Thats a huge compliment btw)
I mean, the rhyrhm,is great, kind of laid back, but puposeful, you as a poet have a gift for doing that,
sort of seducing a reader in, and then giving them a shake, saying okay now think..
The first verse in particular grasped me, just felt good, great read out loud, (I read it to jj n ja) its
just very satisfying.
but, more importantly, I find myself actually trying to feel what you mean, lol, its a work in progress.
but hey, you made me think
so thanks....
Nice write my friend in words
T
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Truthful
It sounds to me like you've been around a couple of times.
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A great ending on this Teddy. I agree with what you presented in this poem of yours. So much truth to this. THANKS!!
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ooh! i really liked this; it flowed so well, and the idea of getting 'change from the piper' really clicked with me!
"because once you've paid the piper.
change is what you'll get!"
fantastic ending! thanks for sharing this with us
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personal experiences
from personal experiences, this is a very good flow for a poem that could have many different thoughts and meanings.. good write
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thank you
i'mnever staisfied and would re-write the hell out of it so others perspectives are valued on my stuff
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This got such great rhyme, it flows well and very enjoyable. You're really the master of rhymes (or however that's spelled ) there are no clichs whatsover. Good work and hope to read more soon!
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I liked this .It has a nice poem and it's good piece overall.Totally agree with all those that commented before.Keep it up!
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I think this has a nice flow, and it is really a good poem. Great job on this, it really envokes people to think...I like that.
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thanks cat
that is a compliment
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This poem is awesome.I really liked it a lot.The subject is not often written about, nice rhyme, and good flow.
I think reading this poem will be always useful so I'm bookmarking it.
By the way the second part of the poem is my favorite.
Well done!
Anan/Cat
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Great!
This is great, it has an awesome flow to it, I really enjoyed it! I would change one thing though, The last line, really should real "Because once you pay the piper, Change is what you'll get" That just flows a lot better to me. Other than that, I loved it!
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thanks hun
i think you saw a rougher version .. thats what it says now
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