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Yellowed Grass






Now the yellowed grass bends

in the ivory dunes

just before the break,

the gulls fight for something

in the tide -

I try to build it into a metaphor,

but it just is,

just the whispery breath of always

in the distant crash of waves

and the lift of the wind behind me.

All poetry begins today,

she said,

then kissed me.




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  • Shannon
    October 20, 2008

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    Hiya, Scott.

    I like this. "it just is"

    yup. and then a kiss?! Lucky bastard.

    Pretty.


  • JenP
    October 8, 2008

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    Scott!! Let me just say, you deserved better than honorable. Now that that's out of the way....its so nice to come back after so long and see that your writing is still stunningly beautiful. True epitome of it! I could read you all day.


  • Victory Gin silver member
    October 1, 2008

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    Quite honorable actually... I always appreciated the gulf between your blocks. Where the poetry happens, truly, ineffably, undecided...ly.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    September 30, 2008

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    Excellent words.

    Sometimes I think your shorter pieces have that much more impact.

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  • Night Hope gold member
    September 29, 2008

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    "just the whispery breath of always
    in the distant crash of waves"

    I loved these lines especially, Scribe. I thought of you the other day, my Friend ~ I bought a cd of Simon & Garfunkel "Live in New York City, 1967". It has the song, "For Emily, Wherever I May Find Her". Good luck in Melissa's contest, Sweetie.

  • neel pakhi
    September 29, 2008
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  • Nicolette gold member
    September 29, 2008

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    This is indeed beautiful. You do simplicity so well, better than most I've read. Loved the swaying image of this and of course yellowed grass in poetry is always a winner.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Saffron gold member
    September 28, 2008
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    Beautiful

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