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The right way

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Carry her like an upturned leaf

and love
shall hollow out a stone.

 

 

 

 

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  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    Oh this is just out of this world, just the sort of thing I am looking for in this contest. best to you


  • PsydewaysTears gold member
    September 30, 2008
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    beautiful

    and in such few words, you've hollowed me


  • mysticstorm gold member
    September 28, 2008
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    Very creative and nice use of metaphor...lovely closing...best to you!
    mystic


  • Paloszoo gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    A lovely take on the prompt! Really strong vocabulary. I really love the last two lines. Great luck to you in the contest!


  • notorious gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    Wow, I think this is one of the strongest things you've ever written...and on a word limit?! That's incredible.

    Love the simile in the first line--it gives me false optimism with the word 'upturned'...love your diction there.

    "hollow out a stone."
    Yeah, not only does this suit the pic, but it's so full of depth I am drowning in my shallow public pool...

    Exquisite.


    Jessica

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