All the light that you possess
is hidden by a blackened wall
When you find your inner beauty
come running to me
I can tear down that curse
free you from your chains
its all broken you're all battered
but I can help you
with Him restore you
You're the light that shines
Darkness all around you
Surfacing from that blanket of death
Everything you hold
Is everything worth giving
That light that you possess
Is something I dream of having
Author notes
The title is a song. That song inspired this =]
You are the moon by the Hush Sound
coolkid69. cody.
A contest entry
- contemporary emotional personal poetry♥ by etoile.
575 points, ended October 19, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sing It!! by Walking Oxymoron.
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Ok.. but it needs to be a song from the liost on the page- there are 20 songs there...
Or send me a link to the song to which you refer. -
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it is. that is the one i suggested you. the 'you are the moon' by the hush sound.
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I'm stupid. I remember now!!!! It's just that you didn't mention that in the author notes...
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This has a great flow to it and very nice images. I too liked the last few lines very much. A good read.
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Great read! You expressed yourself very well and kept me rapt throughout the entire piece! The imagery is beutiful and somewhat 'dark'.
I love the end line, you rally brought it home...
"Everything you hold
Is everything worth giving
That light that you possess
Is something I dream of having"
Great read, keep it up!
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i like it
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this was nice, but I'm not fond of religious poems.
btu this was still really well written, but punctuation could help the flow of this piece.
'Everything you hold
Is everything worth giving
That light that you possess
Is something I dream of having'
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I liked that part.
thanks for entering and goodluck
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i see
i understand now. i didn't get why you said you didn't like my religious poem. but i understand now lol im sorry. i dont remember seeing anything in your rules about it so i didnt know. =] thanks!
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You're the light that shines
Darkness all around you
that's sweet.
but I think that emma mentioned no religion?
I'm not sure.
good luck.
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