uniform need
pressed into khaki
colours strings
pulled by those
supposedly
at the top
of an assembly
how soundly
do the keepers
of secrets sleep
in their shared beds
of cabinets
no scream echoes
longer than silence
but bones
never lose their accents
defying distillation
death has legs
that cannot be bandaged
to look pretty
for any party
protest-ants dance
to unorchestrated beat
and bang of drum
at the edge
of an orange horizon
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death has legs
that cannot be bandaged
to look pretty
Deeply intriguing with more than a touch of brilliance to the startling imagery filling up this delicious poetic treat. I found this both mysterious yet bold, unhurried yet savage. It really captured my interest and the only thing I regret is that it ended. lol
Lovely work.
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Really leaves me thinking.
Good stuff!.
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what a fantastic write-eloquent and sharp prose expressing big dark thoughts here-I like the fragility of this piece, it is a wonderful contrast with the darkness explored, and lends this poem a haunting feel. Great stuff.
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Killing for any reason is wrong , very clever and well put Yvette - how can death look pretty for any party, bravo on this!
galfalfalfalfa
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"no scream echoes
longer than silence" - that is so true, well said...
"death has legs
that cannot be bandaged
to look pretty
for any party"
excellent - I hear collected voices in this poem
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Lovely
Hi mum
Very interesting the idea of protesting-ants makes me think of our human condition. All black legs in motion running to some sort of conclusion. "There be method to his madness".
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Wonderful work! This is of the higest order.
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There you go again with your beautiful musical phrasing . . . Even when you are addressing subject matter that is dark and forboding, you mind and pen sing in perfect diction . . . well done, as usual Yvette . . .
Marc
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your words dance in my mind. fabulous.
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