My reflection is a windswept wash of gray hues
With all light emanating from the ground, imbued in reddish browns.
My eyes water on days like this;
I'm glad it's raining
I coalesce well within penumbras since I live in pockets of open space
My voice, a whisper... my moves subtle; when I shift, I do it slow like a flesh covered tectonic plate.
The only radiating sound is the whimper my heart makes
But that merely attracts a mosquito or three
I bleed for them, and they steal from me.
It's the story of all my relationships passed.
Everything is hardened and dour;
It’s that time of year;
When the outside temperatures match the cold I feel inside
Warmth cannot exist in such a necropolis
Every few months, a new scar… somewhere… a condemned heart;
Its gaping wounds never mending.
I’ve washed several times, but cannot rid the blood from my hair and hands;
These pants… I should have worn black.
My mind is befogged, riddled with nightmares and despair.
Cello’s war, with violins to score the cessation of sensation
As my emaciated hands have a grip on nothing but my own throat.
So I trudge through sublunary twilight;
While Rod Serling looks upon this noir with a tight-lipped grin.
Never before seen on a monochromatic screen
The true demise and bloodletting accompanied by gur..g.l.ed… s.cr.ea.ms
A fingertip graces the red-stained silk lining of heaven
Before I’m dragged away
kicking and screaming
Unknowingly signing convention
With the blood that I have callously ejected
The Devil, now… will torture & rape me of sin
Because even in death… I simply can’t win.
By: Jaye Eryk
Copyright ©2008
Non-monosyllabic comments welcomed
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Tourmented by own's own self. There is nothing darker than not having dreams without light. Blood, wanting to die and in every sense hopeliness...neverending...forever.
's One day I hope you will get some relief. ~Sie
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Amazing and Sad!
This is so amazing and powerful indeed. i enjoyed every line..it made me so sad as well! it touched me and i felt as if you are speaking to me. jaya this is really wonderful
you deserve a
your friend always
juliet
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Did you miss me?
LMAO...
I was too lazy to comment the first time I read this, but hey, it just means I get to reread your works of art. 
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L1=coolest use of 'windswept' I've ever seen, by far
"days like this;" This is a simple and a common phrase, but it implies a LOT and sometimes I care more about implications than originality (which you have like...UMBRELLAS worth of)
"when I shift, I do it slow like a flesh covered tectonic plate."
Kick-ass analogy full of imagery (and science, might I add).
I really hate mosquitoes.
"It’s that time of year;"
Similarly to "days like these", I like the implications you make about how you feel. :/
'necropolis'
Holy hell...I'm sure I've heard this word before, but I don't know what it means. I'm going to go on dictionary.com/
Okay...so it means a cemetery?
NICE.
"My mind is befogged, riddled with nightmares and despair."
Some VERY cool and rarely used words ending in -ed here. Do you know how incredibly unique your diction is? 'befogged' riddled' Hehe...nice.
I adore cellos, although they're AWFULLY melancholy...which obviously works here.
'sublunary'
What does THAT mean?
LMAO
Okay...I just looked it up--coolio
"gur..g.l.ed… s.cr.ea.ms"
Never seen you use dirty pretty...
Awesome as usual
Jessica
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Powerful
The style is believable, but the language is bigger than everyday life. Its colloquial at times and epic at others. It meshes perfectly though. I love it.
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~I coalesce well within penumbras since I live in pockets of open space
My voice, a whisper... my moves subtle; when I shift, I do it slow like a flesh covered tectonic plate.~
I picture a barely discernable blackened shape, its movements deliberate, yet obscure, so subtle that you are not even sure it is there until it obliterates all traces of light becoming its own black hole.
Is it possible to fall inside oneself?
This gives me the distinct feeling of despair swallowing one completely.
~E.
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