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Sorted Harlot

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From the darkest depths she rises,
like the lava from a flow
Touching the hearts of men and boys,
setting them aglow

She torments them with promises,
of lavish games she’ll play
Teasing until their at wits end,
until they’ve wandered far astray

Off the track of righteousness,
into the gutter they will sink
Treating all they’ve contact with,
in ways as dark as ink

With no taste for modern decency,
their manners have decayed
Hurting every girl in sight,
with all humanity betrayed

Corrupting those who’ve fallen prey,
whilst ruining others lives
Turning into cheating hearts,
those men who’ve loved their wives

Her job is done now all mankind,
is wretched in his beliefs
Leaving women around the world,
to live their lives in grief 

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Comments


  • maralisa silver member
    October 6, 2008
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    a wonderful poem good luck in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 2, 2008
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    A nice dark tale you've penned! She is on a mission it seems!!

    "Teasing until their a wits end,
    until they’ve wandered far astray"

    'a' should be 'at' .. I felt the last line of this stilted the flow a little, the rest of the write has perfect flow, but the meter seemed off a bit here.

    Also 'insight' should be 'in sight'.

    Thanks for entering, good luck!




  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    http://vampirella87.deviantart.com/art/7-Days-56731148

    here is the link to your prompt. please let me know if this works for you. if not I will give you another one.

    kat