I choose not to say good bye,
I don't want to think I'll never see you again
You were my best friend, only a dog yes,
But still my best friend...
For whatever the reason, God gave you cancer
We both knew it wasn't fair
But that's the hand God dealt us to play,
I just wish it would have ended another way
Baby- I'm not going to say Goodbye.
Because I know in the end I will see you again,
I just hope that in your last minutes on Earth,
You knew that I didn't abandon you-
I wish I could have came home before you died,
To let you know I'll always love you
But this is the hand God dealt us to play,
I just wish it would have ended another way...
Author notes
xxxbrittanyxxx
Yeah so I live like 2-3 hours from home now on campus at Oakland University, and my dog Brandy died from a kind of digestion Cancer yesterday. When my mom called me and told me I started screaming "NOOOO" and hung up the phone, and as I sit here, my eyes are beginning to fill with tears, but I'm trying not to cry, because she's in a better place now, I just wish she would have never had cancer in the first place especially since 4-5 years ago another one of my dogs died of cancer and she was only like 3 yrs old.
A contest entry
- Ways to Say Goodbye by Xombii.
500 points, ended October 9, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Goodbye Is Not Forever by vampedvixen.
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Comments
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hmm... I think you could do a lot better. This was very straight-forward. It could use a LOT of imagery and maybe a good metaphor. This just seems like a rant about someone who died, really. Just giving you some constructive criticism here. =)
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omg.. im actually crying here...
im not lying, this has broken my heart and stomped on it.
i feel so sad i feel sick. this poem has an incredible impact on me
i feel broken and torn appart by this poem here you wrote. such a sad dark way to say goodbye. its excellently written and even though its so sad its actually beautiful.
well done.
-Lemon Bee-
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This brought tears to my eyes. I lost both my cat and dog last year. I am soooooo sorry for your loss hon! One can feel the emotions in this...
Congrats on the HM!
and love
Nyetta
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so sad, im so sorry for the loss. Great flow in this piece, filled lots of emotion. Bravo!
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hmm
It is one of the most important moments when one get to figure out exactly how life cycles, though hard to understand sometimes, it is definitely the hand God dealt us to play with and we have to go a long with the flow.
I enjoyed the poem but the Back Ground was not the best chosen for the color, It was harder for me to read since I have visions problem, lol but great work
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Moving.
Very nearly in tears. I understand that it's hard to lose loved ones, and pets are just as important as the human members. I'm sorry for your loss. -
Awww I am so sorry about your dog. It's hard to say bye, but death isn't the end of everything. You will see your dog again. Hope you feel better.
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When a dog passes from our lives, very few people understand the bond that can be broken there. You put this into such clear term, such pain-filled words but still manage to give the reader hope. Beautiful
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this reminded me of my dog, she was 12 and we had to put her down after having her for ten year, and it killed me, it get better over time but its still kinda weird when i come home and shes not there
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This.. made me cry.
Okay, I'm going to ramble for a bit, pardon me.
I know exactly what you are going through. My baby, my best friend... my cat... passed away a few weeks ago.
I've had her, nursed her and everything, from the age of two weeks old, and treated her as though I was her mother, I've nursed her back to health so many times it's unbelievable. Well.. I went to go visit my boyfriend, and something was telling me things weren't right. She wouldn't come to me, she just sat and stared, when she would usually come running as soon as I entered my room... so I just smiled and said "buh bye Squirt" and left... I was gone for 5 months... and then two weeks before I was due to come home, my mum told me what happened. her heart had stopped... I cried for a week. Days before I found out I had been talking about how she was my main reason for going home; I missed her so much and was going to bring her home her favourite treat; Doritos XP. I felt like I had abandoned her. I felt like I had betrayed her... and I still have problems being in my room now that I'm home....
Okay, I'm done.
This is beautiful, and I truly can relate.
Thank you so much for entering.
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thank you so much, i am so sorry about ur baby! *hugs* it sucks sooo bad. but what helped me was talking to my grandma about it, and she made me feel better for the fact that she told me God didn't give Brandy cancer, and he didn't take her away- it was the Devil. I don't know how religious you are so if you're not religious than don't feel as if I'm trying to shove this down your throat- thats not what im meaning, im just hoping that you can find a way to feel better about it, and trying not to 1. blame urself or 2. just have any feelings of hate about u or the situation.
oh and i didnt even realize i forgot to put my authors name in my description. reallly sorry on that one, tho i noticed you didnt seem to notice... or at least say anything.
well good luck with judging!
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