She
stood there
in the darkness,
the moon didn't shine
that night,though its strange
dressed in black,dissolved in darkness
she began her tune of penetrating silence
and listened to the wind blowing fierce and
conjusting,tears flowed down her cold cheek bleeding black
the scars she had recieved in the past years built
a reputation for her that pierced her wounds forever
that burnt when she remembered her past doings
of deadly sins that made her cry
black tears lushed in her eyes
a sudden silence came over
she stopped crying out
and remained still
no breaths
Alone.
A contest entry
- Etheree Me Please (Contest) by Paloszoo.
625 points, ended October 6, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do u think of my poem ?
Comments
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Also, you need to recount your syllables in every line. You can refer to the contest home page for the format. Still, I enjoyed this piece! It's something to be proud of!
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Excellent dark write! You're missing a line, though :-( Thanks for entering my contest. I’m honored that you would show your work here. Keep up the great work!
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WAH!
m sorry dear poet..looking at ur etheree's...i just tried it out....i know i misd the 9th line now..jus realised ..thank u dear friend..i knwom not gna win..but tried ma best luck with etheree's...inpired by you!!!!!
=D
~Hugs~
~Anagha~
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