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In Cycles ( Bronze )

Longing  for this tranquility

a space to call my own..

 

Magenta sky touches the spectrum within a core,

deeply massaged,

taking away the ache.

 

Glancing at the cycle,

wheels turning, grind to an abrupt halt..

 

Knee's grazed as a heart skinned

even that started to bleed.

 

lilac silk rested over the chair,

where often I would sit and stare

from the window covered in webs

creating a trap that I often fell into

called despair...

 

 

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  • Midnite wolf gold member
    October 3, 2008

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    yet another great write, slightly haunting, the words kep replaying themselves, wonderful imagery hun, as always i am amazed by your talent, x

  • carole21
    September 29, 2008
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    nice expression . . thanks for the contest entry


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 29, 2008

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    OOoh, me likee And you've rhymed! That last verse really pulls it together well, fantastic work as always. All the best in the contest

    • Reptile Lady gold member
      September 29, 2008
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      Shock horror I have I did it hehe
      First time ever !!!
      Never even realized it until you pointed it out
      Thanks honey


  • daviscth silver member
    September 28, 2008

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    This is such a wonderful imagery filled poem sissy and I really like the last stanza. Good luck in the contest.


  • maralisa silver member
    September 28, 2008

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    aw julie I like your poem and many times over I can relate to your words the imagery and emotion is brilliant good luck in the contest my friend take care marina


  • Topaze gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    Gently the thoughts that care, flow like a thunder, with love that's always fair. You requisition my mind, as I play myself forward, would you still be kind. if I push myself onward.


  • Alyzeh
    September 28, 2008

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    You did it again with your poetry. I stand in awe. Love the starting and ending..Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece with me!


  • chilali
    September 28, 2008

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    Oh my! Magnificent! This, just like the rest of your work is amazing. I loved every bit of it, especially the last stanza. "creating a trap that I often fell into called despair" Such an amazing writer with great talent. Beautiful write! Thank you for a great read

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