Our love is a blessing
But our life is a curse
We stare up at heaven
Miles up above
Wishing on a star
Wanting to be free
Holding you in my arms
The blade not hard to see
Its getting harder just to feel alive
But i'm happy aslong as your with me
Don't worry, don't cry
Everything will be alright
For we'll soon be in heaven
And forever we'll always be
The blade feels warm on my skin
I hope it did on yours too
Our blood entwines
What a beautiful goodbye
Our love is written in blood
And thats how it will always be
Your hand in mine
Soon we'll be free
Its getting harder just to feel alive
But i'm happy aslong as your with me
Don't worry, don't cry
Everything will be alright
For we'll soon be in heaven
And forever we'll always be
And when i build us a staircase
Would you climb it with me
To heaven with our one way ticket
The light is not hard to see
And when we reach the golden door
With a smile on our face
We'll push it open together
And forever we'll always be
We'll always be
We'll always be
watcha think?
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omg
that is a bloody awesome poem
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wonderful poem this is really good emotions hitting hard madlove thank you 4 sharing
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awesome love! i like it.
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beautiful it brings tears to my eyes,beautifully written you are taleneted my friend
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That is so deep! Its really sweet. I hope that you and whoever this is stay together forever!
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Dave that was amazing.
Love the reference to stairway to heaven lol.
No matter which way you put it that poem was deep and meaningful.
In line 10 you should separate as and long.
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wow this was amazing seriously love it XD i read it twice it really has lovely imagery in it and makes me wanna sing it
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brilliant
I think it summerises the true being of love. I love it!
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such a rar emotion, i dont like deep poems but i have to say i really liked this...veryy emotional and i loved the lines "The blade feels warm on my skin
I hope it did on yours too
Our blood entwines
What a beautiful goodbye
Our love is written in blood" great use of words, took my breath away, congrats
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wow!
I could really feel the emotion in this poem, its an amazing peice of artwork I LOVE IT!!!
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I totally love it! I mean when I read this it brings back memories when I use to love some1 dear to my heart
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very tuouching
I have never felt so powerful in a relationship but this poem shows the real love you have for that other person. I just wish someday I will feel what you are feeling but my heart has been torn into two pieces I don't think I would ever open my heart ever again
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Awesome!!
I love the emotion you put into this... I really like the first two lines "Our love is a blessing... But our life is a curse" The last paragraph or lines were probably my faveorite... it is so cute and so true... Any girl would love to hear a guy say this to her! Very good write! -
Wow
This is like a love letter but a very dark love letter
"our blood entwines what a beautiful goodbye" This is almost like a suicide statement the two lovers cut themselfs and watch the blood meet looking into each others eyes they both melt away together. There is just so much dark sinister meanings in here thats what I like in dark writes some what gray at first when you just read it for enjoyment but when you break this down to raw emotional interpitations it says alot more going below the surface.
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wow. it left me, i dont know. its undescribable. i love how its about intertwining people. its amazing.
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It's....beautiful. Like, i was moved. Tears in my eyes.
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nice!!!!
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omg thts really good, i like how everything is about both of them together
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my best friend jesse wrote something like this...its so good
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awww...thts sad i love the part about holding her in ur arms...../tears...
its so like a descibtion of my life.....and it saddens me to read it.....but it was great th -
awww this is so amazing. It's just melts togeather. I love it. ^^ great job.
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awe, i love how this just flows :3
i think it should be a song
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really good!!!! sad, but good!
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o: so beautiful, i love your poems. Nice work on this, love the feeling of it keep it up :]
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ta =]
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Wow
You wrote a lot of feelings and emotions in to one piece...this one deserves to be spotlighted for sure! amazing..absolutely amazing.
ing alone,
Mylee
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haha
thxs
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your poems are the coolest, this one is beautiful. i love it -
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that is so beutiful!!!! i love it!!! ill climb the stair case with you!!!! after school next monday i hope you'll have it finished cuz my ex/bestestbuddie is gonna kill me!!! lol
anyway, i love that poem its the best poem i have ever read!!!! (including the ones bout me my AP dad wrote)
-Sundry
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haha
thxs for reading =]
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WOW! I cried while reading this. I can defently connect to this. ANd you have such a way with words and poetry by itself. Thank you for sharing this piece.
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aww i'm sry lol
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shouldn't the line "But i'm happy aslong as your with me" be But i'm happy as long as you're with me??
other than that its a good poem, really dark but sweet at the same time
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maybe it should
idk lol
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awesome
wow that was amazing. i love it. it paints such a beautiful picture =]
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ty for ya comment
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"Our love is a blessing
But our life is a curse"
"With a smile on our face
We'll push it open together"
i like this poem. because "love is the slowest form of suicide"
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yea it is
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i think it's really beautiful..
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thxs
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very inspiring, it has a sper of darkness to it but it fits, most people can't do that so congradulations. ((yes i no i cant spell today))
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u can't spell lol jk
thxs for ur comment
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ah, i forot these
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lol thxs
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thxs =]
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I really like the song
its a good write just
like everything else
you do....I liked the
last part of your song
To heaven with our one way ticket
The light is not hard to see
And when we reach the golden door
With a smile on our face
We'll push it open together
And forever we'll always be
We'll always be
We'll always be
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thxs
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this is amazing. truly amazing!
"Our love is written in blood
And thats how it will always be
Your hand in mine
Soon we'll be free"
my favorite part
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thxs for reading
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This is really beautiful! I love it, my favorite stanza had to be:
The blade feels warm on my skin
I hope it did on yours too
Our blood entwines
What a beautiful goodbye
Our love is written in blood
And thats how it will always be
Your hand in mine
Soon we'll be free
Awesome Write!
Chey ♥
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ty =]
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Ah.,.how beautifully and how descriptive way you have shown the emtional scenario of your love..it is just breath taking my friend..well said..
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nicely done. I really liked the way this was written and where you took it. Perfect title along with the perfect stanzas. I really enjoyed this from beginning to end. Keep up the great work... here are some cookies and cupcakes *gives you them* PARTY! *dances*
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ty for the cookies and cupcakes lol
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YAY!!!!FIRST 2 COMMENT!I LOVE IT!i love love all ur poems.better than mine.and ur are awesome!!!!!!!
*throws
for writing a excellent poem*
leslie
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thxs for ur comment =]
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