stumbled stars divided
hues left undefined
memories yet spoken
longing for you to be
mine
Please tell me what you think or not?
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Powerful words condenced in a few lines. The bleak picture you pictured fits the longing part perfectly, and the emotion embedded in the lines shines through.
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This is pretty awesome... very well stated, every line and word.
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i very much like "stumbled stars divided". Very nice!
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Great use of grammar (or maybe the opposite ). It really gives the piece a well articulated mood. Great write!
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Awesome poem, short, sweet, and straight to the point. =D
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Short and sweet filled with emotion. You expressed yourself very well without wasting any ink. Great read
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Apart from the longing ...
there is an ownership in both the title and this poem: the memories, albeit hues left undefined. And once again the subtle poem between the lines: no matter what the future bring, my past (and you) is mine.
I so love your work ... I am so glad you posted this. Thank you so much for the joy to read you again.
Love
Myra
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This sounds like trying to capture who you were. Sort of a contradiction, yet a state we are often in.
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Yes..this is what left in life when the case of heart is closed by the goodbyes..very touching piece ..thanks for sharing..
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