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Yesterday's Guess

Missing image

"I sit quietly, listening to the falling leaves -
  A lonely hut, a life of renunciation.
The past has faded, things are no longer remembered,
My sleeve is wet with tears."   

 

Wet with tears of remembering yesterday

hold tight to strings

forcing along the Graces,

stumbling, stuttering, staggering

along the elusive way.

I'd love to know a secret path

back to civilization,

it seems 

grown over,

stubborn to move. . .

Revealing wisdom

best suited

to be

used by the doctor

writing out

the perscription

 

Author notes

The photo is of writer George Meredith. This is where he housed his mule, picnic, 130 years ago. I do not have photo credit artist name.

OPTION # 5:
As your last option I want you to combine
more than one prompt; whether it be a photo,
a quote, ect.. and pen me something tres
magnifique!
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Quote used:G) "I sit quietly, listening to the falling leaves -
A lonely hut, a life of renunciation.
The past has faded, things are no longer remembered,
My sleeve is wet with tears."
~Ryokan, 1758-1831
One Robe, One Bowl, Translated by John Stevens

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    Wow, very interesting write.
    So clever and originally-crafted.
    Brilliant thoughts in this
    and such lovely descriptions.

    Great write!!

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • daisybee
    September 29, 2008

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    Revealing wisdom

    best suited

    to be

    used by the doctor

    writing out

    the prescription

    *O*. How spellbinding this write is, and what a great use of that quote...good luck sis, this really took my breathe away. Poignant rich words.
    x


  • moon2u
    September 28, 2008
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    well done
    bravo


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 28, 2008

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    Nicely done. I enjoy the emotional imagery in this one.
    It is a great little poem. Best of luck in the contest.

    Mike


  • deercatcher
    September 28, 2008
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    The price for seeing in color
    Is to be blind in the dark


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 28, 2008
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    OOo pretty! Let me know when it's done my sensual sis!!

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