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Deadly music- silenced voices


The song of suicide steals too many hearts
Bleeding and broken from the impact of constant non verbal abuse
How did we let the cycle of intolerance start?
Inward cringing, letting freedom of speech be the shield and excuse

Bitter sweet September showcases the losses of the past year
The ones who couldn't take it any more and silently made their escape
Returning students might regret their actions with pain in the air
Not meeting each other's eyes- remembering those too broken to be saved

Children who climbed trees together are divided by blind hatred
Acceptance is lost in the wake of deadly phone calls spreading judgements
tears fall direct result of the addiction to gossip that is  easily widespread
Afraid of school each day because they have been labeled as different

Expected to suppress a part of who they are because they don't love the same
April 17-  a day to break the fearful silence- a day to unite and take a stand
Sacrificing a voice to show support for the ones who live the nightmare each day
Defending a dream so it doesn't just become wave washed words written in sand

How are we so easily forgiving of a society not helping wounds to mend?
Teens feel so out of place, lost and out of hope that they take their own life
Trying to make a difference means fighting with words for every single step
Why doesn't anyone else care that someone who isn't straight is doomed to hide?

Hair covers up the pain shadowing the eyelashes of those pushed away
No one knows where to cast the blame when people sing suicide's song
Time to divorce society if this is how it's rules want us to play
Condemming those who don't have choice- we're the ones who are wrong

Author notes

these are the words I didn't use
1.Angel (s)
5.Celebrity
13.Faith
15.Mend
17.Cowboy (girl)
21.Ride (rode,rides)
23.Letter
24.Seal (ed)
26.Beach
38.Toy
39.Touch (es, ed)
40.Find (s, found)
42.Meet (s)
43.Adore (s, ed, ing)
44.Hair
50.Grace

mylee

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  • Cyanide Dreams
    April 8
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    Wow, deep write. Very chilling write, however, I felt that you compiled your entries into one poem. I also suggest line breaks in this, to make this piece more effective with your words. The flow would be much better as well. I enjoyed your thoughts though and how deep this write got. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • Luciferschild
    January 20

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    a non cliche suicide poem is rare, this one was plain chilling, i would just suggest that it be condensed a bit, thank you for entering my contest and good luck


  • redhanded
    January 10

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    wow very nice write loved it thanks so much for your entry! best of luck 2 u in this contest n in the future and with your writing...

    andi
    (redhanded)


  • Visit.Me.On.Mars
    January 9
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    this is very touching
    --Janette


  • BrittlesSkittles
    December 21, 2008

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    i agree. society is so hypocritical and i can't stand it. so many people want to end their lives because they feel alone and unloved. thanks for your entry!


  • movedon
    November 6, 2008

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    please re-read my rules. you have 24 hours to fix your entry, or will be an auto DQ. ill comment once its fixed.


  • poetic-enigma21
    October 23, 2008

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    very touching,
    great write

    How are we so easily forgiving of a society not helping wounds to mend?
    Teens feel so out of place, lost and out of hope that they take their own life
    Trying to make a difference means fighting with words for every single step
    Why doesn't anyone else care that someone who isn't straight is doomed to hide?

    very strong emotions within...every para hits hard.

    thanks for sharing
    good luck
    cheers
    shilpa


  • spot49
    September 29, 2008

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    How are we so easily forgiving of a society not helping wounds to mend?
    Teens feel so out of place, lost and out of hope that they take their own life
    Trying to make a difference means fighting with words for every single step
    Why doesn't anyone else care that someone who isn't straight is doomed to hide?

    Hair covers up the pain shadowing the eyelashes of those pushed away
    No one knows where to cast the blame when people sing suicide's song
    Time to divorce society if this is how it's rules want us to play
    Condemming those who don't have choice- we're the ones who are wrong
    (This is my favorite part)

    This poem is true and very realistic
    You put so much emotion into this.

    You chose very meaningful power words

    Good luck in the contest


  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    Breath-taking!

    How are we so easily forgiving of a society not helping wounds to mend?
    Teens feel so out of place, lost and out of hope that they take their own life
    Trying to make a difference means fighting with words for every single step
    Why doesn't anyone else care that someone who isn't straight is doomed to hide?

    This is so very true, an excellent write! Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!

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