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To That One Thing I Forgot (What was It Again?...)

 

 

 This volume could break glass,

Overpowering silence

   I long to hear.

 Sounds so deafening,

   drowning the past,
I've grown weary of

     submitting to my fears...

 

 

  I want to remember Your voice,

 

but no,

 

      my true desires

 say want I want to hear.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • XXAgedWithDespairXx
    September 28, 2008

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    Well I like it. I think that it is pretty awesome that you rearranged things instead of leaving it in the same order. I do not have anything constructive to say really so I am sorry for that but I am very interested in seeing how this turns out. Good Luck.