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Passions of Delight



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Everyday I think of you,
I am so lost I do not know what to do.
All the time I remember times we shared,
But whenever I see you I do not dare.
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When we we're together you we're so cold,
Cruel & mean but still I can only sit & dream.
I can not believe that you did this to me,
I feel like a kitten stuck in a tree.
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Maybe someday I will forgive,
But when hell freezes over that's when I will live.
One day you will get what is coming to you,
But not soon enough for me that is true.

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As I sit back & wait for karma to hit,
I remeber all those feelings I use to get.
When you held me close & oh so tight,
I still remember everything from the heat of the night.

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 30, 2008

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    I know this pain myself. All I can say to you is that you need to keep strong, don't let those who hurt you win, for if they loved you they wouldn't put you through that.


  • Riamh
    October 1, 2008
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    A deep piece indeed, showing passion and emotion. Well done on the HM.
    Be well
    Slayer


  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    very interesting

    A sad piece that more than caught my interest, it was very well done and the setup was very uniquely done..


  • BrandyBradford
    September 28, 2008
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    I enjoyed your work along with your backrounds

    very powerfull


  • maralisa silver member
    September 28, 2008

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    wow a brilliant poem I feel your sad emotion of a broken heart I can relate to your words and loved the last stanza they say what goes around comes around and bad karma comes around in the end to the people that hurt us most congratulations on your honer and I hope you feel better for realeasing your hurt heartstings


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 27, 2008
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    yes this is written from your heart. and your heart is broken, I see it through out this poem, I feel the pain as it drips from each and every word. memories of the ones we loved and in those memories there is sometimes pain. I'm glad that you entered and that you wrote this, much better to release it than hold it in.

    good luck

    kat
    s x infinity


  • LoveSpell-PurpleRose silver member
    September 27, 2008

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    Woderfully Written !

    This is a really wonderful poem ! not only is it good but it was written from your heart, This I can see through the word's. I Love It ! Good Luck in the Contest.......As I sit back & wait for karma to hit, I remember all those feelings I use to get, When you held me close & oh so tight, I still remember everything from the heat of the night !!!!!! Blessings Be To You Always ! Brenda Gae

  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 27, 2008
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    the prompts are up

    I hope that you come back and write for me


    • Iridessa MoonFlower
      September 27, 2008
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      I finished the poem now! Thank you for allowing me to run in this contest, it is different...

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