I love your side of the bed when you're gone
The scent of you still lingers upon
The pillow I lay my head down on
Sinking into it's softness
Fading into sleepy memories of the night before,
Of the morning we awoke to
. . . of tiny moments that smile in my mind
As I close my eyes to this empty room
While the darkness wraps it's arms around me
I'm tangled in this void
But the walls bounce back harmonious echoing thoughts
I conjure your voice, your words
Your facinations facinate me once more
Contemplating the volumes of passion
resounding, astounding, intruiging
I could listen forever and never grow weary
Of your words and your wishes,
Your interests and excitements
Spoken so sweetly
Contentment draws a smile across my face
Your fingers trace a path upon my skin
Held so close, yet feeling such freedom
Adoring you completely
Stunned by your kiss
I bite my lip and open my eyes
. . . It's dark! and empty
With faint background rock and indie
And the faint smell of you on my pillow
If i fall asleep now, I will see you tommorow
I know you will make me smile
Thats all I really need so long as
I can make you just as happy
When we fall asleep togeather next
I'll remember i wrote this and sigh
For the honesty of such cliched words
Then kiss you goodnight
And fall asleep by your side
Am I falling for you more each night?
Author notes
This just pilled out of me at 3am it started with the 1st line being a genuine observation then went on into my own little thought stream. Not very edited but i wanted it slightly clumsy and pure to reflect the thinking behind it.
A contest entry
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Comments
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Very Romantic
This poem surly shows the joy you have with your love one at romantic nights. The poem is great.
Contentment draws a smile across my face
Your fingers trace a path upon my skin
Held so close, yet feeling such freedom
Adoring you completely
Stunned by your kiss
I bite my lip and open my eyes
. . . It's dark! and empty
I like these lines. Over all the poem is good. The flow and the expression is good too.
welldone and stay happy.
Lucky -
Very sweet, sincerely felt poem. Beautiful words that flow together. Congratulations on finding such a happy relationship. Your poem glows with it. Nicely written!
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Thank you
Thank you so much for that comment, it genuinely made me smile. I'm glad it flows and is written well. That is a focus I can look to in future now. I look forward to reading more of your work also.
It is lovely to get such good support!
Shivy X =) X
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AWWW
This was a really good write!! I loved the way you expressed yoru emotions... keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!!
Shannon*Leah
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