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Your side of my bed

I love your side of the bed when you're gone
The scent of you still lingers upon
The pillow I lay my head down on
Sinking into it's softness
Fading into sleepy memories of the night before,
Of the morning we awoke to
. . . of tiny moments that smile in my mind
As I close my eyes to this empty room
While the darkness wraps it's arms around me
I'm tangled in this void
But the walls bounce back harmonious echoing thoughts
I conjure your voice, your words
Your facinations facinate me once more
Contemplating the volumes of passion
resounding, astounding, intruiging
I could listen forever and never grow weary
Of your words and your wishes,
Your interests and excitements
Spoken so sweetly
Contentment draws a smile across my face
Your fingers trace a path upon my skin
Held so close, yet feeling such freedom
Adoring you completely
Stunned by your kiss
I bite my lip and open my eyes
. . . It's dark! and empty
With faint background rock and indie
And the faint smell of you on my pillow
If i fall asleep now, I will see you tommorow
I know you will make me smile
Thats all I really need so long as
I can make you just as happy
When we fall asleep togeather next
I'll remember i wrote this and sigh
For the honesty of such cliched words
Then kiss you goodnight
And fall asleep by your side
Am I falling for you more each night?

Author notes

This just pilled out of me at 3am it started with the 1st line being a genuine observation then went on into my own little thought stream. Not very edited but i wanted it slightly clumsy and pure to reflect the thinking behind it.

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  • Shannon62875
    September 27, 2008

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    AWWW

    This was a really good write!! I loved the way you expressed yoru emotions... keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!!

    Shannon*Leah