Strolling in the
deserted park,
he walks by my side,
his sister on my back,
I grab onto her ankles
to restrain her tiny feet
from kicking his elegantly
moving chest.
He whines at her
as she starts to hum sweetly,
and just to torment him
I hum along
he shoots me a playful version
of a glare
but just to make sure I knew
that that face was just for fun,
he moves closer
and crashes his moistened lips
onto my forehead, creating
a moment so breathtaking, his sister
was almost dropped. As her arms swung
back onto my shoulders she squeals,
"AWWWWWWWWWW.... how sweet!"
He lightly punches her and she hops on down.
His focus comes back to my giggling visage
and with his big warm palms just below the
backs of my shoulders, he screams,
"My turn!" and he jumps;
his legs colliding with my straining neck.
We crash onto the crunchy, brown grass,
I turn over, with him right on top of me,
gazing at me with a handsome lovestruck face,
and as we breathe one loud, extensive breath
we block out the sounds of his sister;
laughing and snickering above us.
We start to laugh as well,
and as his lips slowly move closer to mine,
both of us wishing for this moment to
last forever,
the little girl that love made us forget was
there yanked at her brother's arm,
and he got up.
A rush of blushing disappointment appeared
over both of our faces,
and as his sister went trotting along ahead,
he whispered in my ear,
"Next time, it will be just you and me, cutie."
Happiness taking over all emotions in my
golden-braided head, I sprint along,
and I dance with the sweet, young girl
who ignited the bonfire of our love.
Author notes
caitlyn may be cute, but her brother is even cuter hee hee =)
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is this any good? bcuz im not so sure...
Comments
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awh! so incredibly cute
i love moments like this...
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very good. you all are going to make this contest hard to judge....lol.
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I like this. It has a very nice flow to it and lots of nice imagry too. Keep up the good writing!
Janine
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thank ya for the comment! oh and good luck in my contest =)
by the way, awesome screen name! =)
hugs
Adria
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I loved this! It was so happy... gave me that warm fuzzy feeling inside. I really liked the flow as well
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Outstanding
I liked the way that you told the story with lots of little details that made it seem very real. There is a lot to like in this poem. I loved your choice of language and the over all flow of this poem. Love will always find a way. Fantastic to read.
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thanks so much! =)
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I thought that was a lovely piece and i adored the author notes. They made me giggle.
' rush of blushing disappointment appeared
over both of our faces,'
My favourite part was that. You described your poem so well and you can feel the emotions and you can see the poeple. Great work. Good luck in your contests hun, You desearve to win.
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thanks!
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Hi - thanks for entering my contest - I enjoyed this. Best of luck!
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Nice to see it's reality. Very descriptive, sweet, and playful. You could picture it all happening very vividly.
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hahah is this a true story? nice!
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A budding romance, you have captured the feeling. Great job!
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it was o
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um... what is that supposed to mean? =)
sorry to sound rude, but idk what u mean =)
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woah!! this is one of my favs of yours!!
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thank yaz, Chipperz! =)
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Omygawwwd this is SO sweet!! Whoa, it'r really good too (no worries there!) and I can relate to your feelings completely cos it's...so real and pure. Love it yep. Well done!
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aw, thank you! =)
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