Sometimes, when I'm in class
sitting at that desk
writing Sublime lyrics in my notebook
I want to go to my room
Not my dorm room
Not my bedroom
not my boyfriends bedroom,
er....I mean his mom's basement
No, I wanna go to MY room
My room is big and small
My room fits any where I fit
But I don't always fit in my room..
My rooms walls change colors
they change with my presence
my walls are hippie mood walls
My room has shelves everywhere
And they are filled with blue glass bottles
Some of the bottles are graceful
with frosted glass
and silver bobbles around the necks
I like those bottles
But a lot more of them are dark
and the glass bubbles
and is twisted and gnarled
like dead hanging trees
Some I want to break
So I never have to see them again
I just wish that more of them would be...
easier to look at.
Author notes
I wrote this in my psychology class, and edited it throughout the rest of my classes that day.
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It's my first...please don't think I'm emo, I'm really not....
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very deep and personally..sometimes your room tells alot about a person...and good luck in the contest
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This piece is very interesting with a nice flow to it. I love:
My room fits any where I fit
But I don't always fit in my room..
it makes it seem as if anywhere you go, any place that you feel comfortable in could be your "room"
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I like the revery escapism that alludes to a place out of time and existance, where serentiy seems to be simple detatched thoughts from the moment, like a crying child distracted by a shiney object.
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This is excellent, you have given the reader an insight in a small part of you and it sounds fascinating.
We all have a place that's ours, but maybe not as your describe your room.
I enjoyed reading this.
Welcome to AP, I hope you like us all.
All the best...Sue
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Ah, a most fitting place to write such a poem! Certainly something from the collective unconscious no doubt. I'm certian that Jung would have a more interesting take on this than old Sigmund (as we already know his take.) quite poetical throughout. bravo...
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This is a very good write... I feel like you wanted to write more though. It flows contiually, changing directions the last minute. I really like this piece. well written!
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this is really interesting
i got so caught up in it that i was sad how it kind of just left off at the end.
well done.
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you know what they say
it's not good to hold it
.. just kidding if we poets didnt bottle it up .. where would we get our ink?
this is a great write and doesnt seem emo at all ...
not that being emo is a bad thing .. lol.. anyway i loved the write
~teddybare~
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You don't seem emo...
But even if you did, people are people....here is not a place for judging! We embrace your unique ness. (Meh. You know what I mean..)
Individuality, that's it!
Anyway...
I liked this, I just wanna know what's in all these bottles? The psychoanalyst part of me would start banging on about compartmentalizing emotions to make things easier to deal with...
Another part of me would just wonder if you were bored!
Great write by the way... am now going to check out the rest of your stuff!
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good idea
I think that all poetry is meant to mean something different to every person that reads it, and I love that my poem made you think and come up with your own idea as to what I meant! And no, it wasn't just that I was bored, i got the idea from some antique blue bottles that my boyfriend bought me last week, and then I mixed that image with my past. I wont say exactly what they mean to me and what they symbolize though. The magician doesnt give away all her secrets.
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hahaha, no worries on the emo front, you dont come off as one (trust me, around here, emo is a lot more emo than you think)
i suppose a need for your own personal "me" spot is universal, whether that spot is a tangible place, or one you create for yourself. i get the feeling this poem touches on the ones that exist only between your ears and behind your eyes. at least there, even if theres things youd rather not see sometimes, at least you know its yours and yours alone.
was just humming snateria to myself about half an hour ago. sublime has a way of sticking to the head. welcome to ap
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Welcome to AllPoetry
I didn't get the vibe you were emo reading this; I really enjoyed reading this.
The depth you speak with enchants me and makes me want to read this again and again as the room plays in my mind changing
Excellent poem
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thanks
I was hoping it didn't come out as emo.
And your words really do mean a lot to me, thank you so much for the comment!
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