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The Reason

There is a reason that
we often feel that no-one cares
That's because it's our trouble
and very seldom theirs

 

We see things, feel things

very differently you see

They have their own problems

with no way for them to be

 

Inside my heart, into my brain

no matter if they want to

they won't think the same

 

But sharing a problem

is a problem half shared

and we get what is given

when we know that they cared

 

Caring is something

and caring is good

they may not fully understand

like we hoped they would

 

But it's better than nothing

for in nothing is pain

and with help from another

perception we gain

 

So before I go showing

these tears that I cry

I pick up the courage

and wipe my eyes dry

 

Then I face the world

my heart full of hope

for I know for sure now

My life is not broke

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Judith Chandler
    September 29, 2008
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    Well said. Basically, we have to face the world with courage and hope, as you said, not just wait around for other people to care. You said, I think, that people will never care in the way that we would wish. We have to care for ourselves.

    I like this write very much.


  • mcrfan322
    September 28, 2008

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    \great write... u really captured it verry well... i liked how this poem rymed.... i dont know if u made it do that on purpose or not... but its great.... keep up the great writing... i cant wait to read more..... good luck in the contest...

  • Page Deleted.
    September 28, 2008

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    Nicely penned, and speaking with such truth. I liked the hopeful tone of the ending.

    Thankyou for entering and best of luck.

    Forever--x


  • trekkergirl
    September 28, 2008
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    Teenagers often feel that no one cares... I think it is because they feel that it is more important to us "adults" to follow the rules than put them first. They think that they should come first no matter what. And in some ways they should but sometimes you gotta do what'cha gatta do. Know what I mean. Your poems tells of the pain we feel when we think that no one cares. Good job


  • Puppydog gold member
    September 27, 2008
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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    True! so true!!'s I often show I care in small ways and as I look at them they show in ways only as long as I return their actions. If I don't show any kind of action of paying attention back they get so upset. I can't get upset though for if I show some emotion they treat me like I did something terrible. With people it is always one sided it seems. 's

  • The Rainbows Mind
    September 27, 2008

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    Life, has a weird way of presenting the appropriate information at the right time.
    It's amazing how quickly, your perception of life has changed. I am now happy, but I do not know myself. Therefore I do not know you, but I'm beginning to understand, that you aren't just living hapily, blatantly denying all that is "wrong." You just don't let the little things get to you.
    I want you to know that I have a great deal of admiration for you, and hope to learn a great deal from you.


  • perfectdarkangel
    September 27, 2008
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    very well written, and it rhymes. thank you tons for entering it, I wish you the best of luck .

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