You tempt me so seductively
Yet you know not what you do
You lure me with such sweet sensitivity
That I can’t help but to be enamored
With a bittersweet intoxication
Into a delirium you drive me
Over every curve, and valley
With every green light,
Accelerating my pulse further into infinity
Crushing my logic with intuition
Such bittersweet intoxication
Not to be ignored
Gentle kisses, upon my hungry lips
Into felicity, and beyond rapture
To feel such intensity, such fervor
It is not human, supernatural, it is extra concupiscent
Such an ageless bruising upon my soul
A timeless attraction, glorious enamorment,
I bear the inability to bar this loving delight
I do not wish to either.
Author notes
What do you think, it's a tad bit different than the usual love stuff i write.
A contest entry
- It's All In A Kiss by silverscent.
450 points, ended October 3, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think?
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WOW! i am apologize if this comment be weak and not very vociferous like my others but this left me speechless i like it. no actually scratch that i love it. the imagery used, the metaphors, the intensity; it all fits so perfectly placed, like a puzzle awaiting that last longing piece.
this by far is my favorite from you so far out what my eyes have viewed of your writing, wonderfully gorgeous.
Sincerely,
Lost Lost Lover Poet
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I liked it. You used many original ideas, my favourite stanza was the second, and was the most powerful in my opinion. I will say though, sometimes less is more. I see you have a clear grasp on diction, which is always good, though sometimes using too many fancy words takes away the novelty of original phrases such as "Over every curve, and valley
With every green light..."
Thanks for entering. -
hey i like it
It shows those first feelings of new love. Its confusing, and not always wanted, but can never be ignored. I like it, it reminds me of some of the guys I've dated and those first few inklings of desire I felt. I like it.
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ugh
u make me sick u kno tht right?
but ur still a good writer [:
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Are you so certain that the seductionis so unintentional? Shows very nicely that euphoric feeling of the beginnings of something new.
very nice
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