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The Mystery Person

The mystery  person is dark and silent
at all times
The person wears a big black 
jacket with blood stains all over
He lives in a grave yard 
that has broken stones everywhere
At night he walks around the 
streets with a large post
in his hand

He is dangerous and scary
so be careful to go near him

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  • bananasfoster42
    October 17, 2008
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    very intersting!!! (btw welcome to the site!)


  • afroqban
    October 17, 2008

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    so be careful to go near him

    lol love the ending...not to take away from the rest of piece. its all good, but the ending was tight and wrapped it up well with a twist. good job


  • spideracer gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    I'm guessing green is your favorite colour. Your poem here suffers from lack of emotion but still is a good enough write, in years to come when you're older, you'll know what I mean. For now just keep writing and you will get better, already you show a talent for writing poetry that a lot of kids or age and older couldn't do. You asked me to rate your poetry, so this one I give 6 out of 10.


  • So Strange
    October 16, 2008

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    Hmm... I wouldn't be careful to go near him. I can be quite naturally scary, too, though I am not mean and won't hurt anyone unless it's a booger--ooh! Well, this was yet another well written poem... it's very good especially for the length. You have a good bit of short poems... and I'll read some longer ones later on.

    Keep up the very good work. If you keep on writing, you'll only get better with a bit more flow and the meanings will only get deeper as you get older, too.

    This was an eight and a half out of ten.


  • scenescene
    October 16, 2008
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    its different and nice


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    October 3, 2008

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    This is an interesting piece that brings to mind a difference in persona.

    However there are multiple spelling errors, starting alone with the title, which should be "mystery"

    When posting a poem always ensure you complete a spell check so that one can enjoy the words, and not find fault.

    Welcome to Allpoetry
    I hope that you enjoy the site, and if you have any questions please don't hesitate to ask

    • Felixthecat7
      October 5, 2008
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      That i fixed it up
      and if you find any more mistakes could you please tell me
      xoxox Bye Bye

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