[..my life should be made into a movie<]
because this is the perfect story about love and let-down.
with the sweetest and most tragic ending
that will just leave you hanging
and hoping for a surprise scene
and praying for a commentary...
< if i could have ever gotten her to say a word..
it'd be the saddest script,,,//
//,,,oh but with the best scenery
< if i hadn't shredded up all the pictures....
there was passion and devotion
but regrets and cigarettes have long since taken their places.
there was trust and tenderness
now there's loneliness and shame.
faithfulness and promises proved to be emptiness and lies.
sweetness folded itself into bitterness and there it will stay
until i pretty
much
die.
fall has arrived once again and the sun isn't shining as bright as it did in that little town and it sets somewhere else now. and when i lay myself down with it, it never shuts off, it never goes away. i'll take it to my grave.
//(so this is the movie life)>&&
we must've said goodbye one too many times and the miles that weaseled their way between it all finally got the best of her and me and finally made her see.
finally made me believe
the truth about true love
and how it's make believe
In a list
A contest entry
- Autobiographical by Dead Hair.
675 points, ended November 7, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
break out the shotguns, we're riding to town...
Comments
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The form was very effective, and it made your wonderful words even more powerful. The ending flowed beautifully. Well done!


