Curves as smooth as peaks of cream
Rolling through the entwining of emotions
Inevitably melding
Lasting, Feeling, Moving
Crystalline eyes observe each soft movement
Sliding beneath a veil of desire
Nothing more pure than an act of love
If only it would last longer...
Continually wanting, needing
The caress of silken hands
Heights of new emotions, sensations
Eternally wanting more...
Author notes
I am not used to writing in this style...trying to broaden myself, shame my attempts aren't too grand!
A contest entry
- this contest is for adults only. by j i n.
500 points, ended September 29, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Nothing more pure than an act of love
If only it would last longer...
I often get critisized for not being more blatant in my sensuous writing. I have a mental block past the point of getting it going, and have to force myself to go further. This is not a fetish, it is a painful rite of passage I should have gone through when I was 18.
Only now am I realizing sensuality has nothing whatsoever to do with sex at all, but self acceptance, and comfort in being perfectly human. I applaud you, LOL, staring to sound like one of those sex doctors
You did a fine job, it's absolutely beautiful, as well as tasteful. Tasteful-say that three times fast
good luck,
jin -
Intriging
For your first try its not bad
The amount of detail you go into is fantastic
I would suggest trying to make it a little bit longer and keep to the same amount of detail and shed some more hints to what it is about
Nice piece of work
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Beautiful write!
Excellent work! -
OH OH!!!
You write it in the most beautifully poetic way.....
The poem is not too hot but creative indeed.
Good luck in the Contest
Great write
and thanks so much for sharing this poem.
Glenn
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