On the pan she cracks on the edges
Flows in her white gold love rashes!
Wet to oil, bottoms turn up in fumes
Sigh, sizzles to burns in her top cues.
Hot as roasted, spiced in cheekiness,
Crusts within the silky ceramic lust:
Fingers feel cling to the push shove
Tongue melts into lick, flip; lip sucks.
Molds fold with in the hardness cuts.
Aroma breaks the churning of beats,
Touches to heap and urge the squeals
Lifts and drops akin to the greasy eel.
Life is passion in word promises
Beauty in metaphors is my trust.
Author notes
Food:Adult.
Prompt:
51. pen me something about stress how it eats at you until there is nothing left.
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Ha! I read this, and now I'm hungry.
Good job, cute and whimsical.
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Aha, something different in the "eats" category. Very clever use of metaphor, could be adapted to fit most any theme.
Thanks for entering, and good luck in our contest.
Novy & Brazos -
white gold love rashes
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congrats on the gold. thank you for entering. It was very interesting to read.
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This is indeed a very fiery passionate poem. I like that it alludes to passion without being blatantly obvious. Bravo!
Mariana
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I really enjoyed how you took this prompt and made it something entirely different using frying eggs as a metaphor this was truly a one in a kind take on the prompt I think. I did enjoy it very much, but I wish you would have read the rules as I am only allowing pre-writes that have won either 2 tropheys or less or have been entered in more than 2 contests. I am sorry to tell you that I will have to DQ your entry as much as I loved it
you may enter another pre-write that follows the guidelines and or enter up to 3 times with something new or 3 prewrites I am so sorry I have to do this but to judge my contest fair it is the only way, I have had to DQ one other piece already thus far. thanks so much for your entry though it was good why it lasted I hope I dont discourage you from entering again as I am not doing this to be mean but only to be fair. im so sorry. best of luck to you andi
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Very GOOD!, i love the way you use the metaphors to create a picture that is so clear. That is so very creative!
Especially the second lines that go, "Hot as roasted, spiced in cheekiness,
Crusts within the silky ceramic lust:
Fingers feel cling to the push shove
Tongue melts into lick, flip; lip sucks"
That is just pure Genius!
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that's funny. the title and the ending fit. still.. almost erotica, which i didn't want. oh well.
good write.
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very clever
yes i found myself puzzled halfway through when my brain attempted to extract itself from some disturbing associations when i was supposed to be concentrating....then i realised why...thankyou this was very very clever,and is a finalist... where you hungry one morning whilst making love, or cooking an egg and feeling frisky??? on second thoughts i don't actually want to know... -
Interesting metaphor. Thank you for entering
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Wow..lots of imagery and interesting metaphor here....but unfortunately, I specified wrod prompts only, not picture prompts.
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