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reliving life inside the mind of forgetfulness

 

Swimming counter-clockwise,
passing scenes back into my cinema.
Relapse of emptiness,
trying to regain life's spoils.

Forgetting moonlight serenades
and dances on yacht decks,

if only the memory would stay alive.

She wishes I could recollect,
and live that night again.

 

 

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Option - 1. For the nights I can't remember

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  • Jersene gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    In some ways I think of someone with alzheimer's trying so hard to regain memories. Perhaps, it's the title...nonetheless, this could be read several ways and easily allows the reader to think of their own memories...those special moments we want to hold on to. Nice take on the prompt. Thanks for your entry


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    September 27, 2008

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    Sweet serenade

    Lovely sweep. like as if in a dance holding to each step, lovely flow!wonderful metaphors

    Blessings


    Rend


  • luna-midnight gold member
    September 27, 2008

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    aww, wow, i really like this, and such a wonderful ending, good luck in the contest and take care,
    Stephanie ♥


  • wordsmith gold member
    September 27, 2008
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    Can't say why, just that I really like this poem.


  • Darkwell
    September 27, 2008

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    just like a guy to forget those special nights (._.) you need some gingo ginoba but not when you write, you penned this just awesome and i love how you show her side of it in the end too 3 smiling buddies


  • trekkergirl
    September 27, 2008
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    interesting. good imagery

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