Out there
the warmth of the bitter cold
and sweetness of depression
with only the feel of loneliness to comfort me
But inside
A whole new world
of sweet dreams and dry eyes
friendly glares pass me by
taking second looks or maybe all day stares
pieces of me were missing but now the gangs all here
Out there
the kind low self-esteem visited with me
to pry itself into my confidence
won its way to my heart
and created a new more depressed me.
But inside
I found my way to happiness
and traveling towards love
my defense wounds are all healed
and I finally have no thought of changing myself
I'm actually starting to love me
Out there
the cold ,depression,and loneliness
didn't stop me from trying to keep my head up
but the daydreams and silver key would have never prepared me
for what awaits
Author notes
hope you enjoyed and if you're confused its about how highschool is treating me better than the rest. my name is shattered beauty.
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Comments
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An interesting poem,
I didn't realise it was high school! but when I read it back it seems so obvious!!
You have some nice imagery in this, and fantastic description.
I do however feel that this piece would benefit from some punctuation!!
ElectricBloom -
I didn't know it was H.S., but I sensed you had found a better comfort zone than from the other side of the door. Kudos!
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The best is when you actually start to love realize you love yourself, and you are worth it. Nice piece!
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You are definately speaking of experience, hope you further what you found with in to what you have inside, the love of our Father dear one.
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