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White Noise

I scream and Scream
But you never hear
I call out your name
Trying to tell you all the same
If only you would hear me saying
Why not listen to me begging
All you hear is, White Noise

I thought you could see me, See the pain
All the things that I've said, and all things that I've Done
But you blocked me out, of your life
To busy to care, to busy to...

I scream and Scream
But you never hear
I call out your name
Trying to tell you all the same
If only you would hear me saying
Why not listen to me begging
All you hear is, White Noise

If only you could see me hanging on
Trying to find a reason to be staying
But then I realized, it was all a game

I scream and Scream
But you never hear
I call out your name
Trying to tell you all the same
If only you would hear me saying
Why not listen to me begging
All you hear is, White Noise

I tried to tell you everything
Hiding from you wasn't the game
but as I sit and think about you
all I hear is:

You screamed and screamed
but I never heard
You called out my name
trying to tell me all the same
if only I had heard you saying
Why didn't I hear you begging
All I head was...

White Noise.

Author notes

This was something I did for my mom...She has never seen it and probably never will...but it is how I view our 'relationship'. I originally did not want it to be lyrics...but it just turned out that way. ---I also created music for the 'song' on my piano, guitar, and a friends drums..---

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Comments


  • ckwriter69
    October 8, 2008

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    Good job here Luna, I like the lyrical lines alot. second stanza replace buisy with busy. Good job with the last stanza of changing it from I to You adds more effect. You may consider doing that sooner perhaps to reflect a back and forth argument. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.


    • Luna-
      October 13, 2008
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      I love your comments! They help me the most. I shall change that from buisy to busy. I think I might try that soon, writing one where there is an arguement involved, but this one I will just leave alone for now. xD Thanks!!