The pulsing shade
crawled up to her jigsaw
insomniac since the day
he bid her farewell
waiting patiently while
staring down at what was
cellulose pulp ages ago
stabbing the brush
bold paint dabs
against the thin ivory
blinking
until the wood product was
drenched with
the pearls on her lids
shifting to
paint her passionate dreams
secretively
into a midnight sky that
automatically refused
erasing the beautiful memory
lack of hesitance
again?
they are identical
she wailed
this was the color of
his heart and
her defeat
to the one he loved..
unconditionally
Author notes
I love the color dark blue, there's a song that inspired me to write this poem, it's by Jack's Mannequin, title is the same! Do check it out! Although I must add, the lyrics have nothing to do with the poem!
Secondly, I hope I was able to build up an image, its about a woman (an artist) who has lost the man she loved to some other woman and how she relates the color blue not only to his heart but also the night sky, both refuse to hold her dreams, so the poem! 
Hope you like it!
About the image:
I had to search for a picture, I wanted to relate this poem to something! It did take up a lot of time, but then I was able to find this, and it's close to how I felt when I was writing dark blue!
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Credit: Within Temptation
14. “I keep wondering why
I’m still calling your name through my tears”
The Cross
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i really love the last stanza. i felt it. i like the idea of this poem, and it flows well.
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hummmm a poem about blue. Blue just happens to be my most favorite of all colors. This poem is a very well written one. I like it. Thanks for sharing it with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Nicely done! Great job with this piece. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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I can definitely see how this one won so many trophies it is definitely a well written poem. The picture and background that you have included with this poem only add to its beauty. You have done an excellent job in writing this. Thank you very much for entering this contest.
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Thank you for entering my contest Best of luck to you.
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oooh, another dark write penned with brilliance! You sure know how to put the words to your feelings and making it art for the eye to read!
Best wishes!
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I'd have to go all the way to midnight blue- wow...
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colors a mind
What an awesome poem
I loved it from beginning to end
Such a wonderful piece
Best wishes
Julie xx
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Whoa! I felt the color here. Strong emotions bound to this poem makes the reader flow with the poem. The structure, the emotional reach, the word rhythm, or rather the flow, is spectacular. Keep it up!
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Okay, so I was checking to see if you've uploaded a picture to this and I just ended up reading again! This is probably one of my favorites, seriously! Hehe
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Yay! I knew this poem was going to win! Congratulations on the Bronze and Green! Although, you soo deserved the Gold for this one!!
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Wow...you could write a story with the meaning of this poem But then again, poems really are stories already...
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Very beautiful. thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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First of all. I love the song. That's all I've been listening to for the past 2 weeks or so. Lol. How have I never stumbled on this poem's page before? This was amazing. I loved the way you wrote, and the great imagery. Such vivid pictures I tell you. I can sort of relate to this poem very much and that is why it appeals to me even more. Your work, is amazing, I tell ya!!! And yay! A fellow Jack's Mannequin fan
Haha.
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You are a very talented poet and this piece just jumps off the page and captures your readers attention - excellent keep penning dear poet
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Beautiful. Just beautiful. I love dark blue too. I think my aura is probablt that color. Very nice touch.
I shall read more of your work very soon. Thank you for always reading mine, and I will return the favor, over time, promise
Much love,
jin
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Nevermind, THIS is my favorite one so far. Haha Im quite indecisive. I had to read this twice, NOT because its bad, but its deep, deep like the beautiful midnight sky and its aura of colors. I read what you were trying to portray out of this. Might I suggest, the first three lines are a bit confusing, however the following stanza sets the footing and really holds it up well in the fourth stanza. Thats the only critique I have . But nonetheless this was beautiful
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Thank you for your comment Ammon! But I'd like to explain what I was feeling to everyone while writing this poem and what made me write it. So here it goes...
The color dark blue, although usually represents power and seriousness, but while writing this poem I let my imagination run wild.
I mean think about it, we already know that the color 'blue' is used to represent human emotion of sadness and misery. It is also associated with the sky. But, what about dark blue? Dark blue happens to be a shade of blue and if a dab of black is added to the color, it changes to a darker tone of blue. Now try to understand this, if blue is sadness and black is sometimes associated with cold-hearted/black-hearted people (mean or unloving) then what would be the end product?
This is exactly what I'm trying to show over here. The woman's sorrow speaks for itself as she waits for him and the dark blue has invaded her mind. (I refer to it as jigsaw in the poem) She tries to paint what she is feeling but there's a mind block (again due to the dark color and the color she is trying to paint is also dark blue) as for the paper (cellulose pulp, thin ivory and wood product)it is drenched with her tears so she can't paint on it, that is the reason why she shifts to paint her dreams in the night sky, and even the dark sky refuses to hold her memories.
At this point she realizes the similarity between the night sky and his heart, they were both unwelcoming and when I say 'hesitance' I'm actually trying to show how both did not think twice, easily erasing all the memories she had created for herself like they had never existed. Now she knows the color of her defeat to the other woman, it was dark blue all along.
I hope I was able to explain myself well
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Great imagery in this! Really takes the reader into the emotion! Superb poem!
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This is an excellent write...Vivid and well constructed.
Excellent piece to use with the picture.
Bravo
'D'
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wow, this is amazing, i really enjoyed reading this, and beautiful picture
take care, Stephanie ♥
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very interesting perspective...creative
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this is a write you should be very
proud of. it has everything a good
poem should have: excellent imagery,
form, and a voice all readers will
want to hear more of. Bravo!
Love, Lane
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i liked this. I'm also a big fan of the color blue. You should check out the song "tangled up in blue"
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