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Falling Away From Them

Shadows down the wall
Bracing for the fall
Giving life their all
Standing very tall
Sending every call
Bouncing down the hall
“We are ready to never fall.”

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  • Ignored
    September 26, 2008

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    Another... not good... But GREAT poem by you. I like the rhyming all the way through. Again few words have so much meaning to them. Its raw emotion that sends a good vibe out to the reader. I love it and cant wait to see more of your extraordinary poems.


  • cre8tiv-writer
    September 26, 2008
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    What is there to revise? This is a great write!!