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Overwhelmed

 

 



Between folded pages
of love and obsession,
my soul presses
against your heartbeats;
love’s lilting echoes.
Your eyes sing passion,
as my dreams stagger,
overwhelmed
by the beauty,
of you.

 

 

 

 

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  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    Oh Wow, this is beautiful...

    So much expressed in so few words...
    And I've got to agree with below comment 'Sigh', so full of love, passion & heartfelt honesty...
    Congrats on a well deserved shiney...
    Well done!!!


  • Cannonsfire
    November 1, 2008
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    This is what I like to call 'sigh poetry' Congrats on your trophy c


  • HeartTangles
    October 30, 2008
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    Lovely, lovely


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    October 5, 2008

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    Yes..what else we need when love is celebrated with so much beautiful manner..your poetry here is just matchless with its impact..well done my friend....


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    October 2, 2008
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    a lovely piece congratulations on silver


  • hotchocolate gold member
    September 30, 2008
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    Congrats on the silver!!!


  • KitLynn
    September 29, 2008
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    BEAUTIFUL!!

    This poem is wonderful. It says so much in so little. <3 Wonderful WONDERFUL write.


  • Floorboards
    September 29, 2008

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    Aw, Jan! absolutely beautiful! you made every word count here my friend, congratulations on yer silver platter,
    snoogles, Alex.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    September 29, 2008

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    Wow, this is really a beautiful and sensual piece. So much said in so few words. Well deserving of the silver. The gold must have been phenomenal, because this is a knock-out!! Way to go!


  • Rachel Kruger
    September 29, 2008

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    Excellent choice of words compressed in 30. Really liked it - the passion presses deeply on one's heart.

    Congratulations on your silver!


  • rollingzen
    September 29, 2008
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    well done


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    September 29, 2008

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    Well if I was choosing, I think you would hve beat me hands down! Very nice 30 words here. Congrats on your silver.

    Storm

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    September 29, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie

  • Judith Chandler
    September 27, 2008
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    "my dreams stagger" - that's a striking phrase. Like this write, a good take on the prompt.


  • Balldinger silver member
    September 26, 2008

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    a solid hunk of romantic passion left on a carving block without a knive, a spoon, a cow or a moon. beautifully written with an overwhelming tensity about it...

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