Can you see it in my eyes?
Dark secrets and countless lies
It surrounds me, this despair and these broken dreams.
The world is so oblivious,
a labyrinth of desolation and fear.
Am I really here? I can't find my voice.
Angel in the shadows,
take all that's left of me;
shattered pieces and broken hearts,
piece me back together,
my Angel of Death
Author notes
It was written around 12 in the morning, so if there are any spelling errors, sorry
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this is,
pure amazingness!
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thanks !!! ^_^
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awesomee .
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ty
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wow couldnt have been stated better!!
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perfection
awesome (:. i love it. about someone? sounds like it. -
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ty no, it's not about anyone
i didn't think so it that way until now
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perfection
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I can feel the pain. Wonderful write!
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thank you
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i really like this
the line
"shattered pieces and broken hearts,
piece me back together"
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I think you have a great start here. It stands good on its own, but if you choose to expand you could paint a great story. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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Nice Poem Christina
You have penned a wonderful poem on pain. The many aspects i found when i read it.
Lovely poem and a delight to read.
Hey u don't think that this is not that good, because it was written around 12 in the morning........as i went through this poem i think it quite a beautiful little gem here ... my favorite kind
Great write
and thanks so much for sharing this poem.
Glenn
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thanks
glad you like it
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i really like this, luv the feelings and the endings, wonderful wording, awshum write
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thank you
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I really enjoyed that. It was great to read and it helped show a picture of what you wanted the readers to see. You have a great talent for this. Keep up the great work and you will be able to publish some of your work. Keep up the great work!!
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thank you
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VERY good poem! Keep writing! :]
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i love this poem it's really good
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thx
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SWEET.
i like your poem... need to write some more..
thats how i write GREAT JOB!
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thank you
yes, i do need to write more
i'm gonna turn this in to my humanities teacher for extracredit too
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VERY good, Christina. I like it a lot. It may be short but it is still good. I love the last two lines
Love,
Tay
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thank you very very much i'm glad that u liked it
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Welcome to allpoetry
Some of my best poems were written in the wee hours of the morning. So I think this has depth it has a voice. That is what poetry needs. Its short but that is okay, there are a lot of short poems here.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
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I did write more, but i didn't like the ending
and thank you very much for the review
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OMG!!
awesomew poem!!
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thank you
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