Hate of man is hate of self,
Yet who can realise that but man?
But would he want to realise it?
For he would then have to hate more than he can.
Author notes
Not one of my best... it doesn't flow as well as the rest of mine. I'd love some constructive help on the 3 and 4th line.
A contest entry
- Short Poems' Wanted!! by SignifyingNothing.
450 points, ended October 19, 2008, 123 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Should I capitalise 'man' and 'he'?
Comments
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I like the first two lines quite a bit, but I agree that the last line is a little clumsy. I don't know how to rework it though. You would probably have to change it completely, but a change could always add another dimension to the poem.
You have a nice style and show quite a bit of talent. Keep writing! And thanks for entering.
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