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A mouse daye

 
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Carried in the door by the cat,
Still alive and took a big bite,
Cat screaming and mouse running.
 
I have to admit I was in the sofa jumping,
Screaming like a slaughter pig,
But I wasn't the only one up there.
 
My sister, my mother, even my brother,
Screaming to each other to take the bugger,
None wanting to leave the sofa.
 
Ever since he's lived in the wall.

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  • BehindTheShadow
    December 18, 2008

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    Damn, I had a mouse 2 years ago, and it ran right over my naked foot. I nearly had an accident, if you know what I mean, lol. Good job!


    • Meroza
      December 18, 2008
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      Tee hee, that must kinda suck if it did happen


  • poetrandy
    November 6, 2008
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    I like it!

    Cute! Good luck in the contest!


  • justgot2loveme
    October 13, 2008

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    Now this is really cute,
    made me laugh.
    I really enjoyed it.
    Good luck in the contest.

    Justgot2loveme


  • jasminerose
    October 12, 2008

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    lol Cute as I happen to adore mice..lol this tickles the funny bone and the imagery of all of you on the couch is perfect!
    Thank you for the ssss
    My best to you in this contest!
    Linda


  • daviscth silver member
    September 29, 2008

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    You did a wonderful job with the imagery in this poem my dear. I just loved it!!! Good luck in the contest.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    lol

    quite funny, we all have our little quirps with them and love the way you express your emotions, good luck in this contest
    Linda


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    Are they still sitting on that sofa Wow!
    I just pictured this in my mind and it brought a big smile to my face! Mind you, I think I would do the same thing
    Thanks so much for your entry
    Gaylene


    • Meroza
      September 28, 2008
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      No we had to get out of the soffa in the end, tho we did spend half a day in it.


  • chilali
    September 26, 2008

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    Hahahaha! That was so cute, and funny! I loved it!
    Good work Merosa

    • Meroza
      September 26, 2008
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      Thank you, this is a true story, keep that in mind!

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