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CellAr DOOr

Cold, damp
Lack of oxygen
Can't breathe
Can you see me dying?

Shut the door
And let me die
You see my eyes
Red with blood
Matching my heart
After you broke it

Cold, wet
Dripping sweat
Can't breathe
Can you see me dying?

Shut the door
And let me die
You did this to me
Can you see
Or are you blind like me?

Close the door
Leave me be
Can't breathe
Can you see me dying?

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  • JustSimplyLissa gold member
    November 26, 2008

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    Chilling write, very visually effective. Sad also. Sometimes we feel like dying when someone hurts us so badly. Great writing. Keep it up