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24/7

 

Lifestyles seem to change in a "Blink of an eye"

until every last cents spent, we'll continue to try

plenty of fortune for this city that doesn't sleep

some loose it all just getting in ...way too deep!

 

Those neon lights and glamour affixes the mind

while 'Lady luck whispers to Lay it all on the line

 

Bottomless whiskey glasses stir hopes in the pot

simple winnings from a few hands that were hot

Don't forget beggars who are down on their luck

saying what they must to con you out of a buck

 

Buzzers and bells ring loudly through the night air

and another becomes rich screaming without care

 

A fever takes over as the cards lay across the felt

life savings gone from a bad hand that was dealt

Many up for days knowing the next hands the one

afraid to walk away or there life will come undone

 

Laughter cries out when the dice stop on eleven

as this city without sleep goes for another 24/7!

                                                                  Las Vegas

 

 

 

 

 

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  • cirque du soleil
    November 16, 2008

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    Nice work
    rhyme didn't at all seemed forced, but I think it would be better off without the quotation marks in line one..or did you do that on purpose?
    I like the picture! It looks almost unreal, doesn't it?


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    September 29, 2008

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    Vegas where you can arrive in a 50,000 dollar car and leave in a 300,000 dollar bus, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 27, 2008
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    Nicely done. Great rhyme and flow.

    Mike

  • loafy
    September 26, 2008

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    nice

    I have to say, bums aren't bums because they're forced. Go to bum and offer him a job, he will refuse!


  • AmazinJason
    September 26, 2008
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    haha
    this is good


  • ebaby
    September 26, 2008

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    Interesting write, and very true. Lady luck shouldnt whisper she should just be there by your side to bring you luck! LOL LTNS best of luck with the entry...

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