I've tried so many ways to find my destiny
no matter how I try it always gets the best of me
Which road to take, or which advice to heed
doesn't matter if in my mind I don't believe
How can you speak to my heart and soul
if over your love you have no control
Well believe it or not this is what I believe
A bridge to the one I love is my destiny
Please tell me what you think
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Dear Maryann,
The first four lines start the poem off well; the next two are rather enigmatic, hinting at darker possibilities. The last two lines would benefit from some reworking to avoid the repetitious "believe".
I do get your message but, if you are asking for my opinion of your poem, that's it.
PS: Still waiting for those photos you promised.
Applause, (because it's great to see you writing again!
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.)
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