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Paradise Lost.

I watch upon the blue crystaline ocean,
I watch the waves stroll up the beach soothingly in their quiet lament.
I watch the birds in arrow head formations fly towards the sun,
Its beautiful red and orange warmth as it pushes up from the horizon.

I watch upon the bloody red ocean,
I watch the men fall into the foam as the tracer starts to mow them down,
I watch the jets in arrow heads strafe the beach with cluster bombs,
As the red and orange mushroom cloud rears its ugly head...far...far...away.

The Earth is dying.

For here I be, sitting watching,
Not so many years have past.

My paradise lost,
My heart beets with hope,
But cries softly.

We're killing ourselves.

Day by day we kill eachother,

Murder and war.

Paradise has been lost upon this world and Gaia is dying.

I find myself alone upon the smoldering craters,
That wicked smell of death and cordite,
Scratchs and tears at my throat,
Sons father brothers lovers,
Lay twisted and crumpled everywhere,
And the sky bleeds a firey red.

I'm alone now.

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  • OutsideTheMirror
    September 29, 2008

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    Hmmmm it's a good write, but to be honest the whole time I was distracted looking for some Milton references besides the title. I'd either change the title or add some heaven/hell/devil/fall of Adam and Eve stuff.

    .:Marie:.


    • Rafter169
      September 30, 2008
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      Hey cheers for the comment.

      Milton refs? Hmm I didnt base the title on that. It was just what popped int om yhead. Its purely stand alone.