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Unlocked Eternity

 

 

 

         Someone said to me once

          (regrettably [like most things],

             I only half-listened),

 

"You got to find yourself

before you can find what you want."

 

I found a key, I found a door,

                              

                         I found a life I hate,

I find myself

wanting the other side,

that one possessed

   in the sweetest way.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • nichtmich silver member
    October 11, 2008

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    Bitter and raw! Reminds me of my own uncaring youth and decisions made that changed my life without my weighing the consequenses.