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Higher Power

they violate your rights
only wanna piss you off
the long arm of the law
to make you feel soft
when you commit law-wise treason
they dont bother to hear your reason
they just say that you are slime

(GS)

prophets of the 10 commandments
violating the amendments

Anyone aroused by it? lol, j/k

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  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    September 26, 2008
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    welcome to all poetry

    Just a small tip for you but try adding in the use of punctuatiopn such as comma's and full stops to help break the lines up but to also help build flow and rhythm to the piece. this had a strong feeling of anger within it and it really left me something to think about. well done and welcome to the site

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