Attractive assorted colours,
Flickering like the stars,
Dancing like professionals,
Growing higher and higher,
The beauty of it,
So pretty.
The red,
Symbolising love,
Affection,
Passion,
Beautiful as it grows,
Warming the inside.
The orange, or yellow,
Like gold,
Symbolises riches,
Beyond our dreams,
Ending the poverty,
Making the world a better place.
The constant flickering,
So beautiful,
So amazing,
So warm,
Reach out and touch
The passionate reds,
The rich gold,
Touch it.
It will be ours.
Touching the object,
Changed the view,
The beauty turned to disgust,
The pretty turned to bitter thoughts,
Growing higher,
Growing deadly.
The red,
Symbolising hate,
Pure hate,
Anger,
Violence surrounding the air,
Burning the positive thoughts.
The orange, or yellow,
Showing cowardice of yourselves,
Symbolises the weakness within,
Strengthening the object,
As we cower in fear,
This is the cause of poverty, not the prevention.
The constant flickering and burning,
So beautiful,
So amazing,
So deadly,
Reach out and touch
The angry reds,
The cowardice gold,
Touch it...
You will burn with hate,
It poisons the mind,
Binging one word to form on your lips
Rolling harshly off you tongue,
One word..
Fire.
Author notes
I used a different style to this poem. I just wanted to know what you think of it. I was experementing and I'd like some honest opinions. Should I continue writing like this? Or should I stick to the style like my other poems?
What do you think?
Comments
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very interesting good work
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i say both...
each style has it's merrits.. my self i'm a rhymer i've tried to write poems soley of descriptive imagery .. i cant seem to tell if they are any good or not and some where along the writing line i always end up having rhyming parts in there .. lol so for me rhyming is all i can seem to do... this is verry good though
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Good
I rlly like the rhyming poems better, because I like how they sound. But this poem was rlly descriptive to me and I liked it a lot.
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