No home
to live in.
No human kindness.
Nobody notices.
Author notes
This person has no home.
In a list
A contest entry
- Be brilliant please by Lavender Butterfly.
450 points, ended September 26, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short Poems' Wanted!! by SignifyingNothing.
450 points, ended October 19, 2008, 123 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This really captures the stark reality of a person without a home. It is simple and staightforward but very powerful. The picture really enhances the poem. The style of the poem is really conducive to its subject, I think- the simple stark language relating to the message. Good job.
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Wonderful
Short, but so well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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For a short poem you said so much. True that there are so many homeless people who are hungry and have no place to go. You really had emotion showing the sadness in this piece. Well Done.
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your poem depends very heavily on the pic, but it carries itself well enough without the pic ... in fact, the pic depends upon the poem for real poignancy and power ......... this is a neat trick and very good indeed! You have the trilogy negated by peoples lack of their own delicate position in the word: with increasing movement of syllables, the first is lack of hope (5 syllables), the second is the lack of charity (five syllables but compacted into one single line, giving forward momentum into the final line with its lack of faith (six syllables in one line, making an even more compacted and potent motion) ... yes this is surprisingly powerful and most readers will look at it as a nice and kind way to show the hardships of others, but this poem is more than that ... it is the way that we all take our own place in life as deserved if it is good and permanent as though we were better than they. But there shall be epiphanies for many this year.
the times they are not a changin', but changin' they are this time!
I am sure that means something
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wow! You really got a lot out of this little poem that I wrote. I am glad because I thought it was an excellent little write. When I saw that picture on google.com I just had to write something with it. Thanks for all the lovely little comments. I really appreciate it. thanks again
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Just so sad... x
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sad but true.
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Brilliant!
I love this peom, in all its simplicity - yet it is a very powerful statement. I also like your brick wall background. Best of luck in the contest!!! Peace, Cyn 
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thanks glad that you liked it and the background. Wasn't doing anything special with the background. Just didn't change it off of that when I had written a previous poem is all.
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right indeed
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terribly true
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This is a sad but true take on this prompt, sadly all too common around the world. Best to you in the contest
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thanks. It's a serious situation don'tcha think
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