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A tiny grain of sand

It rains in my head

on Thursdays

 

the cool drops intoxicate senses -

wash away

 

                 guilt

 

that peels

       

                edges up

 

I tell myself

one foot in front of the other

with acceptance

of getting over you pressed into each step

 

so let me pretend

I’ll move on

instead of remaining a trickle

along blue-backbone

 

a shadow of doubt

that kills me softly

in the scatter of light

 

you told me once

a tiny grain of sand

forms a pearl

if circumstances are just right

 

a thought covered by

dream-dust

that sparkled like your eyes

in early morning

 

we tamed a song -

silver sounds

never intended for use

it made us feel important

in that space of time where you had

too much promise

 

now dandelions bring me comfort

for some odd reason

- so totally unexplainable

 

and I felt you today

in a reverse reflection

along frayed nerves

like late night cravings

constant

but never satisfied

 

 

 

9/26/08

Author notes

Prompt: Constant Craving

I hope it isn't too long...I'm trying to tone my ass down some on length

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  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 2, 2008
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    Leave your ass where it is!


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    there are sooooo many lines in this poem i would love to use as my own...example: "we tamed a song," "it rains in my head on Thursdays"...the entire poem is just wonderful. wow. Love, Lane


    • zochit2me gold member
      October 2, 2008
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      Thank you...
      and use whatever you want...Be inspired!


  • albymyheart gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    Awesome! Great imagery, thoughts and expressions. Very poetic free verse. Good luck in the contest...alby

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